for Destiny Isn't Permanent6/15/2006 c1 
3Adaku
Wow, you got this idea from a commerical? You are the first person I ever met that has. Anyway, I like that this story so far is first person. First Person actually gives more details, well that's my opinion.
I'm not good at grammar so you won't be getting any criticism from me. Overall, keep up the great work. I hope you'll update soon. Till next time
waterhealer
3AdakuWow, you got this idea from a commerical? You are the first person I ever met that has. Anyway, I like that this story so far is first person. First Person actually gives more details, well that's my opinion.
I'm not good at grammar so you won't be getting any criticism from me. Overall, keep up the great work. I hope you'll update soon. Till next time
waterhealer