9/9/2006 c9 3marsalbione
hey, Im back again, and now fully cought up! mwahaha...
I can already tell that I will like Trace. He seems to make an interesting contrast with both Anant and Luxas.
You know, this has been bothering me for awhile, and I just keep forgetting to ask it. Your profile says you like Kingdom Hearts. Is it just chance that his name is Luxas, or is it a combination of the names "Luxord" and "Roxas" from KH2?
hey, Im back again, and now fully cought up! mwahaha...
I can already tell that I will like Trace. He seems to make an interesting contrast with both Anant and Luxas.
You know, this has been bothering me for awhile, and I just keep forgetting to ask it. Your profile says you like Kingdom Hearts. Is it just chance that his name is Luxas, or is it a combination of the names "Luxord" and "Roxas" from KH2?
8/25/2006 c8 1anticliche freak
I normally dont approve of Family ties as plot devices, but this one looks promising. as the family ties are not opressive or otherwise antagonistic.
Aphrodite seems rather, evil, but that was expected, the only thing Im wondering is ares will turn out to be an antagonist or protagonist.
Im a little confused as to gender relationships, as in the beginning you seemed to suggest extreme heterophobia, and that isnt coming through very much, though it would add flavor to your story.
Your story is very original in Idea and very clarified. While I May dissaprove of bring ing in father relationships as plot devices, I still love this story.
Thanks for the review, and yes I am continuing the story (I have chap. 2 up)
I normally dont approve of Family ties as plot devices, but this one looks promising. as the family ties are not opressive or otherwise antagonistic.
Aphrodite seems rather, evil, but that was expected, the only thing Im wondering is ares will turn out to be an antagonist or protagonist.
Im a little confused as to gender relationships, as in the beginning you seemed to suggest extreme heterophobia, and that isnt coming through very much, though it would add flavor to your story.
Your story is very original in Idea and very clarified. While I May dissaprove of bring ing in father relationships as plot devices, I still love this story.
Thanks for the review, and yes I am continuing the story (I have chap. 2 up)
8/24/2006 c7 3marsalbione
Im sorry, I had forgotten about this story, but then my friend (anticliche freak) is like, "I found this story you reviewed awhile back."
And here I am.
I like how the plot is developing. The characters still seem to convey very realistic emotion, and the writing is very good sa well. I want to figure out all the mysteries around the war between The Gods and how it seems to warp the society these people live in.
I also want to congratulate you on the length of your chapters. I dont have much of an attention span, and your chapters fit that span perfectly. ^^
Im sorry, I had forgotten about this story, but then my friend (anticliche freak) is like, "I found this story you reviewed awhile back."
And here I am.
I like how the plot is developing. The characters still seem to convey very realistic emotion, and the writing is very good sa well. I want to figure out all the mysteries around the war between The Gods and how it seems to warp the society these people live in.
I also want to congratulate you on the length of your chapters. I dont have much of an attention span, and your chapters fit that span perfectly. ^^
8/18/2006 c2 1anticliche freak
Chapter two was equally interesting, though not quite as much to my liking. The only reasonfor this is that I like to have some liking or sympathy for the main character, but the writing itself was good quality.
Chapter two was equally interesting, though not quite as much to my liking. The only reasonfor this is that I like to have some liking or sympathy for the main character, but the writing itself was good quality.
8/18/2006 c1 anticliche freak
This is most likely the most original story I've seen on fictionpress, and even from the beginning it seems to hold lots of potential for themes and plots. Gender interactions will be a very interesting high point in the plot.
This is most likely the most original story I've seen on fictionpress, and even from the beginning it seems to hold lots of potential for themes and plots. Gender interactions will be a very interesting high point in the plot.
8/16/2006 c8 Arcana
Lol, you were right to think the ending was cause for giggles. Great chapter. I can't wait for more!
Lol, you were right to think the ending was cause for giggles. Great chapter. I can't wait for more!
6/24/2006 c6 7Pearls and Formaldehyde
I LOVE IT! Chapter 3 was just awesome! lol, but I love Luxas anyway, even if he did get showed up. Oh well, lol. Hurry and update!
-Alice
I LOVE IT! Chapter 3 was just awesome! lol, but I love Luxas anyway, even if he did get showed up. Oh well, lol. Hurry and update!
-Alice
6/16/2006 c2 3marsalbione
Im enjoying it so far. I dont think Ive read any kind of story like this yet. Its very original, and so far, pretty dark. I cant wait until I can read the rest of it. -marsalbione
Im enjoying it so far. I dont think Ive read any kind of story like this yet. Its very original, and so far, pretty dark. I cant wait until I can read the rest of it. -marsalbione