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10/27/2006 c1 17Cum grano saltis
I love this poem, it`s just wonderful!

the contrast of the jolly title and the serious and sad content.

awesome job!
7/21/2006 c1 pure grace
You did a really, really great job on this. I read the first stanza, and thought, Aww! This is sweet! And then read the next few and thought, Yeah, I feel that sometimes. And then read the last one and was just sorta blown away. I mean, there's only a one word difference between the first and last stanzas, but it makes a huge impact on the poem as a whole. The subtle, seamless transition of feelings and stanzas was beautiful.
6/28/2006 c1 12SwitchVale
That was scary good. Very scary good. Yeah, I'm still speechless...
6/18/2006 c1 63Let It Rain
Great job! I liked the repetition and the way you broke it at the end.

I noticed that in the first stanza you used the word 'day' twice (in lines right next to each other) so you may want to change that around.

Otherwise, I really liked the theme of this poem. Keep it up!
6/18/2006 c1 19anamellie
hey! this is nice and unique... some authors want reviewers to criticize their work, so i'll be saying something here... umm... this is not a critique, but a question. why is the title 'rainbow'? i really think that it would be better if you make it 'never blue' or 'mostly blue' because you keep on emphasizing that on each stanza. that's just a suggestion and... that's it. keep writing!

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