for Locker Buddies10/7/2007 c1 
3hopeless-flame
hm. she knows jeff intimately also? like more then acquatince? and such?
3hopeless-flamehm. she knows jeff intimately also? like more then acquatince? and such?
7/21/2006 c5 MonkeyMohawk1
ha i like ur story...interesting...u should make ur chapters longer...but still very good...UPDATE!
ha i like ur story...interesting...u should make ur chapters longer...but still very good...UPDATE!
6/27/2006 c5 nadljfaithglingh
I felt the same way as Jeff: "that's it?" LOL. But I can understand Michelle, being a cynic myself and all. So is art going to mimic life or life art? I am intrigued. Do update again soon, yes? Yes. :)
I felt the same way as Jeff: "that's it?" LOL. But I can understand Michelle, being a cynic myself and all. So is art going to mimic life or life art? I am intrigued. Do update again soon, yes? Yes. :)
6/27/2006 c5 Noelle
Ha! i like that story...
altho, when michelle is trying out for the part in the play, i think she should be a bit more reluctant to try out for the part. i dont know...just maybe...
Ha! i like that story...
altho, when michelle is trying out for the part in the play, i think she should be a bit more reluctant to try out for the part. i dont know...just maybe...
6/23/2006 c5 anon
Update soon!
Update soon!
6/23/2006 c5 3poppendol
Nice story. I wonder, will her live imitate art? well, keep it up and update soon.
3poppendolNice story. I wonder, will her live imitate art? well, keep it up and update soon.
6/22/2006 c4 nadljfaithglingh
It seems like a pretty good story so far. I like your characters. Yes, a little cliched, but c'mon, what ISN'T at least slightly based on a cliche on this site? And I think you're doing a great job. Small constructive crit, but it does bug me a little when you're in 1st person ('I thought yada-yada') and then you suddenly switch to 3rd ('He was startled blah-blah') and back to 1st again. But then again, that's just the grammar freak in me :)
I hope you have fun on your trip! Update as soon as you get back!
It seems like a pretty good story so far. I like your characters. Yes, a little cliched, but c'mon, what ISN'T at least slightly based on a cliche on this site? And I think you're doing a great job. Small constructive crit, but it does bug me a little when you're in 1st person ('I thought yada-yada') and then you suddenly switch to 3rd ('He was startled blah-blah') and back to 1st again. But then again, that's just the grammar freak in me :)
I hope you have fun on your trip! Update as soon as you get back!
6/21/2006 c3 9SolisLuna
Hmm, cliche stories aren't always that bad, I find most highly amusing. Update soon, please!
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9SolisLunaHmm, cliche stories aren't always that bad, I find most highly amusing. Update soon, please!
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6/21/2006 c3 1Twinkle Star Bell
cute chapter. Keep writing this story is different and very interesting! Update soon!
1Twinkle Star Bellcute chapter. Keep writing this story is different and very interesting! Update soon!
6/21/2006 c3 cherise
I think sticking to the cliche can be preferable to cliches with plot twists because the entire story would have been leading you in a direction you've become comfortable with, only for them to be yanked into another path. It can be extremely confusing rather than helpful at times. But that's just my (unnecessary) opinion.
I think sticking to the cliche can be preferable to cliches with plot twists because the entire story would have been leading you in a direction you've become comfortable with, only for them to be yanked into another path. It can be extremely confusing rather than helpful at times. But that's just my (unnecessary) opinion.
6/21/2006 c2 secretshadow
Update soon!
Update soon!