for Teardrops in Your Hair6/21/2006 c1 
31bjw
I like the looping effect. It adds this surprising element of poignance into it...of sad resignation, too. Like how the narrator couldn't do anything...but watch her[?] own teardrops fall.
Love the line "But instead they drip out my eyes". So heartwrenching.
Simple, but brilliant. Keep writing!
31bjwI like the looping effect. It adds this surprising element of poignance into it...of sad resignation, too. Like how the narrator couldn't do anything...but watch her[?] own teardrops fall.
Love the line "But instead they drip out my eyes". So heartwrenching.
Simple, but brilliant. Keep writing!