for Trick DRAFT7/21/2010 c36 
6Rogue-writer-16
Ohmigosh! Okay, I'm a tiny bit excited now :D Just a tiny bit. Haha! Kidding. I'm so glad you've decided to pull Trick back out and share with us. I'm very much looking forward to it and can't wait!
RW
6Rogue-writer-16Ohmigosh! Okay, I'm a tiny bit excited now :D Just a tiny bit. Haha! Kidding. I'm so glad you've decided to pull Trick back out and share with us. I'm very much looking forward to it and can't wait!
RW
7/21/2010 c36 M
Awesome.
Awesome.
7/18/2010 c35 1Candescence
I love this story and the characters. I'm so happy you are making a sequel, cuz I'm not ready to let go of them just yet...You did great with this story, it didn't drag, there was enough drama, it was wonderful! good job
1CandescenceI love this story and the characters. I'm so happy you are making a sequel, cuz I'm not ready to let go of them just yet...You did great with this story, it didn't drag, there was enough drama, it was wonderful! good job
7/15/2010 c35 TheWomanBehindTheMask
OMG! I loved TRICK! A friend sent me the link, claiming that it was awesome, and threatening me with a death of glares, if i did not. Having read this story, I gotta say, I'm very glad that I took my friends advice. You are an amazing writer, please never stop!
OMG! I loved TRICK! A friend sent me the link, claiming that it was awesome, and threatening me with a death of glares, if i did not. Having read this story, I gotta say, I'm very glad that I took my friends advice. You are an amazing writer, please never stop!
7/9/2010 c2 DesertBlueRose2
THANK U! Lets see why am I thanking you? Well thank you for posting this wonderful story here and giving me a perfect reason for staying up past midnight! I mean it. I really like it even if its not in its fully edited verison. This is a great verison still. And the second reason why I'm thanking you is becuase i just like barely found fictionpress and as im trying to find amazing stories to read i keep hearing about this GREAT PLAGARISM FIASCO and i keep finding so many authors had to delete their work but i'm glad thta you didn't do that...yet or so. So thanks again for being a great writer! :)
THANK U! Lets see why am I thanking you? Well thank you for posting this wonderful story here and giving me a perfect reason for staying up past midnight! I mean it. I really like it even if its not in its fully edited verison. This is a great verison still. And the second reason why I'm thanking you is becuase i just like barely found fictionpress and as im trying to find amazing stories to read i keep hearing about this GREAT PLAGARISM FIASCO and i keep finding so many authors had to delete their work but i'm glad thta you didn't do that...yet or so. So thanks again for being a great writer! :)
7/7/2010 c34 Follow-The-Spiders
Hmm, I just wanted to say a few more things.
1. There are too many characters, no offence meant. It kind of gets hard to concentrate on everyone character, so maybe cutting back on a couple would do (only those characters that appear once or twice, and have no further importance towards the story line).
2. What was the whole glass cracking incident about? And I get the prophecy-ish words that appeared in the glass, but I'm still lost about what exactly Helana is.
3. Did Hels tell Vels everything?
4. I love the idea of Chameleons, it's pretty darn good!
Good job with the story!
Patts
Hmm, I just wanted to say a few more things.
1. There are too many characters, no offence meant. It kind of gets hard to concentrate on everyone character, so maybe cutting back on a couple would do (only those characters that appear once or twice, and have no further importance towards the story line).
2. What was the whole glass cracking incident about? And I get the prophecy-ish words that appeared in the glass, but I'm still lost about what exactly Helana is.
3. Did Hels tell Vels everything?
4. I love the idea of Chameleons, it's pretty darn good!
Good job with the story!
Patts
7/7/2010 c35 Follow-The-Spiders
Hey Skylar,
It was a well-written story. Good job!
However, I've got to say, some parts were slightly off, if you get my meaning.
Don't worry, I'm not flaming you or anything, because like I said before, your story was well-written!
Again, congrats on finishing it, and I hope that you're writing a sequel, because they're still a lot of unanswered questions, such as:
1. Why'd Terra become a Blood Doll?
2. What happens to Adam?
3. Is there something going on between Jakobi and Terra? I felt that there was a certain...hint about something going on between them. Maybe that was just me.
4. What happens to Seth? Does he discover that he's a part shapeshifter?
5. What happens to Akej? Ekaj's brother? (Right?)
6. What about all the other Chameleons? Do they attack Trick? (I have to say, I love his name! Trick is pretty awesome personality wise and name wise.)
Okay, if there are anymore questions, I can't remember them. However, I'd like to say this again, GOOD JOB!
Patts
PS. I really like how you made up the term Blood Doll, it's pretty ingenious! :)
Hey Skylar,
It was a well-written story. Good job!
However, I've got to say, some parts were slightly off, if you get my meaning.
Don't worry, I'm not flaming you or anything, because like I said before, your story was well-written!
Again, congrats on finishing it, and I hope that you're writing a sequel, because they're still a lot of unanswered questions, such as:
1. Why'd Terra become a Blood Doll?
2. What happens to Adam?
3. Is there something going on between Jakobi and Terra? I felt that there was a certain...hint about something going on between them. Maybe that was just me.
4. What happens to Seth? Does he discover that he's a part shapeshifter?
5. What happens to Akej? Ekaj's brother? (Right?)
6. What about all the other Chameleons? Do they attack Trick? (I have to say, I love his name! Trick is pretty awesome personality wise and name wise.)
Okay, if there are anymore questions, I can't remember them. However, I'd like to say this again, GOOD JOB!
Patts
PS. I really like how you made up the term Blood Doll, it's pretty ingenious! :)
6/15/2010 c35 Hali2010
hi again, i really liked your story, it was really fun to read and besides the first couple of chapters(i really thought it was going to be a twilight knock-off) it was really original and thoroughly enjoyable. Anyways, good job and you'll probably hear from me on some of your other stories(i plan on checking them out pretty soon) XD
hi again, i really liked your story, it was really fun to read and besides the first couple of chapters(i really thought it was going to be a twilight knock-off) it was really original and thoroughly enjoyable. Anyways, good job and you'll probably hear from me on some of your other stories(i plan on checking them out pretty soon) XD
6/12/2010 c14 Hali2010
ok, well this story has been completed for a while now so i'm not even sure you read the reviews any more but(just in case you do) i have to tell you that i really like your story so far and that i absolutely LOVE the part where she says "Erica was looking rather pretty without her makeup and Em was looking like a man without hers." HAHAHA! holy crap, i laughed so hard when i came to that part lol. anyway, great story so far XD
ok, well this story has been completed for a while now so i'm not even sure you read the reviews any more but(just in case you do) i have to tell you that i really like your story so far and that i absolutely LOVE the part where she says "Erica was looking rather pretty without her makeup and Em was looking like a man without hers." HAHAHA! holy crap, i laughed so hard when i came to that part lol. anyway, great story so far XD
6/9/2010 c18 Sereta
In my opinion, there are too many characters in the story. I don't even know who is who, except for Helena and Trick. And the chapters are too long. I find myself scrolling down until I see Trick's name. But that is just my opinion. You are a good writer though.
In my opinion, there are too many characters in the story. I don't even know who is who, except for Helena and Trick. And the chapters are too long. I find myself scrolling down until I see Trick's name. But that is just my opinion. You are a good writer though.
5/14/2010 c35 Anara Celebvilya
That story was excellent! I love Trick. He's a bit multi-polar, but he's a great character none the less. In fact, that probably makes him a better character.
I have a question. Why could Helena automatically do that grounding thing? And what the heck was the whole shattering the window thing about? Was it just that she was talented with the whole aura thing? Sorry, that was was actually three questions. Oh well.
Thanks for a great read!
That story was excellent! I love Trick. He's a bit multi-polar, but he's a great character none the less. In fact, that probably makes him a better character.
I have a question. Why could Helena automatically do that grounding thing? And what the heck was the whole shattering the window thing about? Was it just that she was talented with the whole aura thing? Sorry, that was was actually three questions. Oh well.
Thanks for a great read!
2/18/2010 c6 2Devilish Kisses
I for sure though this chapter would be totally cliché! Love the irony!
2Devilish KissesI for sure though this chapter would be totally cliché! Love the irony!