for Trick DRAFT9/18/2006 c7 icedfaerie
Great story you have here. I really like the plot and the characters...poor Helena though. I'm kind of confused about Patrick, but I guess that's the way he's supposed to be, right? Anyway, I can't wait until the next chapter.
Great story you have here. I really like the plot and the characters...poor Helena though. I'm kind of confused about Patrick, but I guess that's the way he's supposed to be, right? Anyway, I can't wait until the next chapter.
9/6/2006 c5 
1girl-imposter
hey its really interesting as you have caputred the reader with the suspense of the dreams and also the school...Jakobi seems to know more than he's letting on and yeah it is just really capitvating...i really like the otry and i think you should keep going with it...
1girl-imposterhey its really interesting as you have caputred the reader with the suspense of the dreams and also the school...Jakobi seems to know more than he's letting on and yeah it is just really capitvating...i really like the otry and i think you should keep going with it...
8/30/2006 c5 NowOrNever
I'm impressed. I think you've done a really great job at weaving a story here, and even though I'm not much of a fan of supernatural, I'm definitely hooked.
You've managed to make Trick seem both believable and lovable, although at the same time, we can see why Helena is scared of him.
I did find the concept of a wolf attacking her slightly unusual, but in a supernatural fiction that isn't a problem.
I'll be waiting for another chapter!
I'm impressed. I think you've done a really great job at weaving a story here, and even though I'm not much of a fan of supernatural, I'm definitely hooked.
You've managed to make Trick seem both believable and lovable, although at the same time, we can see why Helena is scared of him.
I did find the concept of a wolf attacking her slightly unusual, but in a supernatural fiction that isn't a problem.
I'll be waiting for another chapter!
8/30/2006 c1 Ocean's Lover
I liked this chapter and also the way you described the house, some people hate that but I like to have a vivid picture in my mind you are very good I can't wait to read the other chapters
I liked this chapter and also the way you described the house, some people hate that but I like to have a vivid picture in my mind you are very good I can't wait to read the other chapters
8/25/2006 c4 xhellogoodbyex
hahaha yes i get to review! (this be katie by the way)i loved it... one of the better chapters in my opinion. i guess...
hahaha yes i get to review! (this be katie by the way)i loved it... one of the better chapters in my opinion. i guess...
8/25/2006 c1 veggie-4head
Oh- Trick's hot. Can't wait to read more! No grammar mistakes that I could find and the plot has captured my attention. My only suggestion is that you can cut back on the details about the house. You can always drop in a few here and there, but reading full paragraphs about them gets a tad bit boring. Overall- nice work. Going to read next chapter...
Oh- Trick's hot. Can't wait to read more! No grammar mistakes that I could find and the plot has captured my attention. My only suggestion is that you can cut back on the details about the house. You can always drop in a few here and there, but reading full paragraphs about them gets a tad bit boring. Overall- nice work. Going to read next chapter...
8/24/2006 c4 1definately.maybe
So far I really like this story. I'm not too sure where it's going and it seems to be stemming off in a bunch of directions. Not in a bad way though. I actually like that I don't have a complete picture of what will happen. The story also has more dimensions to it then some stories I've read and that's something I really like. The biggest problem I see with it is spelling mistakes and missed letters. Other than that it's good so far, keep it up :).
1definately.maybeSo far I really like this story. I'm not too sure where it's going and it seems to be stemming off in a bunch of directions. Not in a bad way though. I actually like that I don't have a complete picture of what will happen. The story also has more dimensions to it then some stories I've read and that's something I really like. The biggest problem I see with it is spelling mistakes and missed letters. Other than that it's good so far, keep it up :).
6/25/2006 c2 My Bitter Swan Song
Wow, I really like this story! It's a lot different than anything else I've read before...good job! Keep writing!
Wow, I really like this story! It's a lot different than anything else I've read before...good job! Keep writing!