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7/4/2006 c5 1FirePrincess-007
You ended it really quick, but I still enjoyed it. Good luck with your future stories. ^^
7/4/2006 c1 2akaCHEEKS
omg... don't tell me you're like this in real life.. i mean the stories are really good and everything but i the contents of it.. omg.. eew.. who would let lil girls pee on them? what the heck... please don't tell me you're like this in real life
7/4/2006 c5 akaCHEEKS
he is physco! he needs a girlfriend who will put up with his pervertednes and horniness! omg
7/3/2006 c3 3Blue Pimp
She does really nasty things to him and he likes it...blah. Karen seems like a really sweet girl, will he eventually let her go? Also Phil uses innocent words and he's intelligent but he's doing something so wrong, y7ou'd expect someone that curses every five seconds to be doing something like this. But I enjoyed the chapter...
7/2/2006 c3 jojoann
"With my left hand I held Lily up..."

Fifth paragraph up from the bottom.

Lily was from your last story. This girls name is Karen.
7/1/2006 c2 230lovelikeamixtape
you do a really good job of staying in character, as sick & disgusting as it is. you're a good writer.
6/30/2006 c2 3Blue Pimp
This story is diffrent. It's good I like, but did he have to do that, I know it's what the story's about but the way he decided to kidnap her...I dunno, I just think he could've let her wake up and tell he accidently hit her and let her go, she would've never known. Anyway I like where the story's going and how descriptive you are.
6/30/2006 c2 jojoann
“This was too dangerous. If she woke up and saw me, she might tell someone, and I could go to prison. I didn’t want to go to prison. I could, however, prevent her from telling other people by locking her up-or I could kill her.”

Wow, getting ahead of himself. Did he forget that she’s not even awake yet therefore she can not tell a soul?

“If I had sleeping gas I could put her to sleep and she would probably never remember anything when she woke up next time…”

Way too much Bond.

“I heard the front doorbell of the house ringing. Dad was home!”

Why is his dad ringing the doorbell?

“…but tonight the family was complete: Mom, Dad, Me, Elron, and of course little Karen.”

Oh god, he’s psychotic.

It’s a lot easier for me to understand now that you explained it. I couldn’t really get into the story like I usually can because there was that screaming thought in the back of my head saying it was wrong. But now I understand so I can actually get past that and read it.
6/30/2006 c2 Prettylikevintage
You really need help, please go get some before it's to late.
6/29/2006 c2 1FirePrincess-007
Is he seriously planning on keeping her there? I hope he figures some way to get out of that.
6/29/2006 c1 3Blue Pimp
Kinda scary but very interesting. I do a lot of the same stuff he does, except for looking at little girls, so I can identify with him on how boring life is and I always wanted a little kitty, Elron seems very cute. Are you going to update soon because I can't wait to see what he does next.
6/28/2006 c1 1FirePrincess-007
Oh, so you're writing another one! I'll look forward to another chapter.
6/28/2006 c1 10JojoAnn
You have a strange obsession with 18 year old pedophiles, little girls panties, and porn. It's creepy.

I hope your not like this and you just write about this stuff. If you do just write about this stuff then maybe you should try a bit of variety. Two stories in a row about this makes you seem like the characters in your books.

Anyway, I'm sorry if that offended you. I just thought that if you really aren't like Phillip and Kieth you might want to say something because people are begining to think so.
6/28/2006 c1 5living-out-a-sacrifice
At the beginning Philip seems kind of distant, but by the end of this chapter, I understand him a bit better. I think this is going to unfold in an interesting way, so I'll read more when you next update.
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