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3/20/2008 c1 460Time To Change
you've probably been told already about the typo in "drifting".

I think punctuation could be used better to improve rthythm and fluency of the piece.

Good use of reflective, descriptive tone. The imagery was really pretty.

imogen

... perhaps I wanted to be loved forever O_o
7/23/2006 c1 24Lady Isabella De Luca
i really enjoyed reading it. Well written and moving. I love the last line, "And for her a broken crown"
7/3/2006 c1 169Creepshow
the reviews are appreciated, I hope you're enjoying my scribblings.
7/2/2006 c1 65Nemonus
Interesting! Good, unique rhythm. "breath" should be 'breathe' I believe. I like the underlying story and emotion to this; it could be two ghosts with a dramatic past between them.
7/1/2006 c1 30Puella Caeli
this is as lovely as it is mysterious... i'm still trying to figure out what i make of it exactly, but i do know that i like it - especially the third stanza and the last couple lines. nice! =]

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