for Rhythmic Emotions7/2/2006 c1 Fiore Chnudth
Love can be a bitch!
I liked the rhythm of your poem and I agree much with how you reflect on certain lesser great aspects of love.
The best thing about this poem as I see though, is the order of it. Often when writting poems you have difficulty figuring out if one paragraph should go before the other or not. And often when you read, you think someone to have prioritised wrong. These things can be argued of course, but sometimes the order kills the flow and the natural evolve of the poem.
But I think the flow of it is good, and this is makes it a great poem.
Love can be a bitch!
I liked the rhythm of your poem and I agree much with how you reflect on certain lesser great aspects of love.
The best thing about this poem as I see though, is the order of it. Often when writting poems you have difficulty figuring out if one paragraph should go before the other or not. And often when you read, you think someone to have prioritised wrong. These things can be argued of course, but sometimes the order kills the flow and the natural evolve of the poem.
But I think the flow of it is good, and this is makes it a great poem.