for Apsid8/16/2008 c6 serendipity90
i cannot believe this story has so few reviews! maybe the people here on FP are losing it over teenage summer fling stories but seriously ppl out there! comon review good quality pieces like this!
i cannot believe this story has so few reviews! maybe the people here on FP are losing it over teenage summer fling stories but seriously ppl out there! comon review good quality pieces like this!
8/9/2006 c1 
3miss-blackhair
*dances around in front of the computer* aahh...
i cant believe you're back! heheh..
anwaies, your style of writing havent changed, meaning its good. good plot. love the story. the names are so exotic. heheh.
okies, good luck in the writing. =)
3miss-blackhair*dances around in front of the computer* aahh...
i cant believe you're back! heheh..
anwaies, your style of writing havent changed, meaning its good. good plot. love the story. the names are so exotic. heheh.
okies, good luck in the writing. =)
7/19/2006 c6 37Clavel
Hey!I just caught up with the story, it's going wonderful!
Really, I'm liking it a lot!
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37ClavelHey!I just caught up with the story, it's going wonderful!
Really, I'm liking it a lot!
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7/18/2006 c6 13Vampgurl99
Hey!
Awesome story so far! I really like the idea of a war torn country and then having to marry the other Prince/King to stop the fighting. How does Apsid feel about Samson? I know that they were betrothed but they seemed to have a great relationship going on. Dare I say love or is that too strong of a word for their friendship/relationship? Will she feel guitly about having to be betrothed to Silas? I don't know if she can do this but would she write Samson later on?
I can't wait for the coming chapters cause I can sense a love/hate relationship between Silas and Apsid coming on. Also, how will the people react to Apsid? Will they hate and throw things at her or will she find a second home in their country?
Some sentences in your writing you add punctuation when not needed and have choppy sentences. For instance, "You can be as angry as you like. But I will never strike you so I expect the same policy from you." Instead of seperating the But from Like you could have put a comma and kept it one sentence. There are others where you do not use commas when needed so the flow of the sentence is off.
Anyways, I can't wait for more chapters so update soon!
Vampgurl99
13Vampgurl99Hey!
Awesome story so far! I really like the idea of a war torn country and then having to marry the other Prince/King to stop the fighting. How does Apsid feel about Samson? I know that they were betrothed but they seemed to have a great relationship going on. Dare I say love or is that too strong of a word for their friendship/relationship? Will she feel guitly about having to be betrothed to Silas? I don't know if she can do this but would she write Samson later on?
I can't wait for the coming chapters cause I can sense a love/hate relationship between Silas and Apsid coming on. Also, how will the people react to Apsid? Will they hate and throw things at her or will she find a second home in their country?
Some sentences in your writing you add punctuation when not needed and have choppy sentences. For instance, "You can be as angry as you like. But I will never strike you so I expect the same policy from you." Instead of seperating the But from Like you could have put a comma and kept it one sentence. There are others where you do not use commas when needed so the flow of the sentence is off.
Anyways, I can't wait for more chapters so update soon!
Vampgurl99
7/7/2006 c3 14writer-in-progress101
ohh now this is getting interesting four years is a long time, poor girl, how old is Apsid now?
14writer-in-progress101ohh now this is getting interesting four years is a long time, poor girl, how old is Apsid now?
7/7/2006 c3 kaesu brot
this is looking interesting... I like Silas
this is looking interesting... I like Silas
7/6/2006 c2 ich bin die disko
yes... excellent, this looks like an exciting start, "Weebles wobble but they don't fall down." Umm... are you sure about that? Do you have any prior knowledge of the Weebling properties of Weebles, governed only by their limited Weebliousity? Are you even aware of the potential impact such an action could have on the environment?
yes... excellent, this looks like an exciting start, "Weebles wobble but they don't fall down." Umm... are you sure about that? Do you have any prior knowledge of the Weebling properties of Weebles, governed only by their limited Weebliousity? Are you even aware of the potential impact such an action could have on the environment?
7/6/2006 c1 ich bin ein kaesu brot
finally, you decided to type this story.. w00t!
finally, you decided to type this story.. w00t!