for I Have KIlled1/23/2007 c1 tesa131313
Very morbid. Morbid indeed. I like this poem because I can FEEL the guilt in the voice of the poem.
Very morbid. Morbid indeed. I like this poem because I can FEEL the guilt in the voice of the poem.
8/3/2006 c1 
270dustytiger
wow, this is powerful, i love the way you tell stories like this, cause it always flows well, and keeps the rythm, everything all good poets should be able to do ;)
270dustytigerwow, this is powerful, i love the way you tell stories like this, cause it always flows well, and keeps the rythm, everything all good poets should be able to do ;)
7/4/2006 c1 2Ellesmere
This came out well too. Correct me if i'm wrong (which i probably am=) but it sounds a little like prose-poetry, which i really love. The entire piece itself is powerful and i like how the entire thing is image after image but with flawless description. This is definately something hard to experience and then have to live after, but the way you express yourself truly is amazing.
~Ellesmere~
2EllesmereThis came out well too. Correct me if i'm wrong (which i probably am=) but it sounds a little like prose-poetry, which i really love. The entire piece itself is powerful and i like how the entire thing is image after image but with flawless description. This is definately something hard to experience and then have to live after, but the way you express yourself truly is amazing.
~Ellesmere~
7/3/2006 c1 236mezzie
there is a lot of grace in this poem, and your descriptions give excellent depth, especially considering your final tie-in to the question of morality.
strictly style-wise, you could make this even better by working on the 'flow' of it. if you're going to capitalize at "Kicked them off" you should capitalize at the beginning with "Muffled sounds heard". your fourth last line has an extra 'an', and "and as his body go cold" should be "and as his body goes cold".
i love the question of "was anything really adverted?" it's such a great question!
mezzie
236mezziethere is a lot of grace in this poem, and your descriptions give excellent depth, especially considering your final tie-in to the question of morality.
strictly style-wise, you could make this even better by working on the 'flow' of it. if you're going to capitalize at "Kicked them off" you should capitalize at the beginning with "Muffled sounds heard". your fourth last line has an extra 'an', and "and as his body go cold" should be "and as his body goes cold".
i love the question of "was anything really adverted?" it's such a great question!
mezzie
7/3/2006 c1 113Travis C. Eckert
Either your good at explaining or you witnessed/did this. R&R my stuff too please.
113Travis C. EckertEither your good at explaining or you witnessed/did this. R&R my stuff too please.