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7/5/2006 c1 38roxy-babe912
Okay, I liked the description in the beginning. However, near the middle things began to fall a little flat. It's very suspenseful though, but I can't say the ending of the prologue makes me want to read more.

Perhaps a bit more information to hook readers and a more drastic ending may be to your advantage. Overall: Good, once again, I especially liked the description.
7/5/2006 c1 humaninsanity from neopets
This is an interesting prologue. I like the way that you manage to blend description and dialogue-it helps to hold the reader's attention. The prologue is also just mysterious enough that it makes one want to keep reading and see what happens next.
7/5/2006 c1 3blindlysearching
Wow, that was awsome. You really descibed the characters well. They seemed so relateble. =) I put you as one of my fave authors, and your on my author alert. Just incase you post something else, I want to read it. =)

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