for Title Pending7/5/2006 c1 
38roxy-babe912
Okay, I liked the description in the beginning. However, near the middle things began to fall a little flat. It's very suspenseful though, but I can't say the ending of the prologue makes me want to read more.
Perhaps a bit more information to hook readers and a more drastic ending may be to your advantage. Overall: Good, once again, I especially liked the description.
38roxy-babe912Okay, I liked the description in the beginning. However, near the middle things began to fall a little flat. It's very suspenseful though, but I can't say the ending of the prologue makes me want to read more.
Perhaps a bit more information to hook readers and a more drastic ending may be to your advantage. Overall: Good, once again, I especially liked the description.
7/5/2006 c1 humaninsanity from neopets
This is an interesting prologue. I like the way that you manage to blend description and dialogue-it helps to hold the reader's attention. The prologue is also just mysterious enough that it makes one want to keep reading and see what happens next.
This is an interesting prologue. I like the way that you manage to blend description and dialogue-it helps to hold the reader's attention. The prologue is also just mysterious enough that it makes one want to keep reading and see what happens next.
7/5/2006 c1 3blindlysearching
Wow, that was awsome. You really descibed the characters well. They seemed so relateble. =) I put you as one of my fave authors, and your on my author alert. Just incase you post something else, I want to read it. =)
3blindlysearchingWow, that was awsome. You really descibed the characters well. They seemed so relateble. =) I put you as one of my fave authors, and your on my author alert. Just incase you post something else, I want to read it. =)