for Unintended1/25/2010 c1 
25Kyllex
Cute. (: Unfortunately, there were lots of grammar errors and typos. I'd point them out but I'm too lazy to go through and find them all again. Sorry. But other than that, it was pretty good.
25KyllexCute. (: Unfortunately, there were lots of grammar errors and typos. I'd point them out but I'm too lazy to go through and find them all again. Sorry. But other than that, it was pretty good.
8/16/2007 c1 wama
hikie sis! ^_~ SOON? you haven't update for almost a year! '
i want you to continue!~!~!~!~!~!~!~!~!~!
hikie sis! ^_~ SOON? you haven't update for almost a year! '
i want you to continue!~!~!~!~!~!~!~!~!~!
8/29/2006 c1 i write with red ink
Oh... this is lovely. No critique, just update, okays? Thanks for the review, I may continue that story! Keep on writing!
Oh... this is lovely. No critique, just update, okays? Thanks for the review, I may continue that story! Keep on writing!
8/11/2006 c1 23Unwritten Answers
i noticed that the same names were shared for this story and the other one, If You Were Mine. is there a link between the two?
23Unwritten Answersi noticed that the same names were shared for this story and the other one, If You Were Mine. is there a link between the two?
7/22/2006 c1 1Coup
"I wanted to look away y heart skipped a beat"
Just a little typo over there. No big deal.
1Coup"I wanted to look away y heart skipped a beat"
Just a little typo over there. No big deal.
7/13/2006 c1 18Plinky
This is nice - really interesting.
The first few lines were lovely - really interesting way to start a story.
I'm intrigued... this is actually a really interesting beginning. Unique.
A couple of grammatical errors, and I'd advise against making Tyler too perfect, but apart from that, lovely!
Really nicely described atmosphere, concisely written, didn't drag at all.
I like the lyrics, too. :D
Keep writing!
18PlinkyThis is nice - really interesting.
The first few lines were lovely - really interesting way to start a story.
I'm intrigued... this is actually a really interesting beginning. Unique.
A couple of grammatical errors, and I'd advise against making Tyler too perfect, but apart from that, lovely!
Really nicely described atmosphere, concisely written, didn't drag at all.
I like the lyrics, too. :D
Keep writing!
7/5/2006 c1 LoveMySoul
This story, in my opinion, is statring off well so I suggest that you keep writing.
This story, in my opinion, is statring off well so I suggest that you keep writing.
7/4/2006 c1 4untitled furniture
That was awesome. I'm very speechless of what to say next...so lets leave it at that.
4untitled furnitureThat was awesome. I'm very speechless of what to say next...so lets leave it at that.
7/4/2006 c1 4sofiya05
hey,
1st of all great song! i love it. listen to it all the time and fits in really well with this chapter.
ooh i like this thing, just recently me and my friends were talking about past lives, we're really into theories about life.
so it seems like this Tyler guy already knows that it's something to do with past lives but am not too sure, so i'll just wait for you to update...hopefully soon.
Sofi
4sofiya05hey,
1st of all great song! i love it. listen to it all the time and fits in really well with this chapter.
ooh i like this thing, just recently me and my friends were talking about past lives, we're really into theories about life.
so it seems like this Tyler guy already knows that it's something to do with past lives but am not too sure, so i'll just wait for you to update...hopefully soon.
Sofi
7/4/2006 c1 18Serious Sonneteer
It's not that bad a piece of writing. Other than a few minor errors in tenses, I can't see anything wrong with this. By the way, you won't mind giving me a critique or two for my latest work, will you? And, if I may ask, what country are you from? 'A. Maths' stands for Additional Mathematics, doesn't it?
18Serious SonneteerIt's not that bad a piece of writing. Other than a few minor errors in tenses, I can't see anything wrong with this. By the way, you won't mind giving me a critique or two for my latest work, will you? And, if I may ask, what country are you from? 'A. Maths' stands for Additional Mathematics, doesn't it?