for Once Upon A Time You Belonged7/25/2007 c1 
1Motown
my first ever friend was an older boy who was allergic to tree nuts, seafood, dairy, cats, dogs, bees, penicilin, and had asthma. we were best buds.
1Motownmy first ever friend was an older boy who was allergic to tree nuts, seafood, dairy, cats, dogs, bees, penicilin, and had asthma. we were best buds.
8/19/2006 c2 2Charmarie
Cool story. It's really realistic. You should've gotten more reviews than this. Anyways, this is rally good. Looking forward to your next chapters in this story.
2CharmarieCool story. It's really realistic. You should've gotten more reviews than this. Anyways, this is rally good. Looking forward to your next chapters in this story.
7/11/2006 c2 4sofiya05
hey,
wow the kid's really perceptive for a 4 yr old...she is 4 right? but you've got an interesting start and can't wait to see more of it.
To be honest, i thought that the older sibling was a boy at first but yeah... anyways update soon.
Sofi
4sofiya05hey,
wow the kid's really perceptive for a 4 yr old...she is 4 right? but you've got an interesting start and can't wait to see more of it.
To be honest, i thought that the older sibling was a boy at first but yeah... anyways update soon.
Sofi
7/6/2006 c1 17Rayne Logan
Wow... that's pretty weird that you just reviewed my story... you psychic or something? :P
I was just reading yours - Once Upon A Time.. You Belonged - and I must say its pretty good. ^^ The only thing I'm not too sure about is the use of 2nd person... the "You", it's a good change for a story, and gets the reader involved in the plot, but after a while, it might get a little tedious.
I love the plot though. And I can actually relate to the characters, as can quite a lot of people, I have a younger sibling myself, and yes... I did get ignored when she was younger, and I still do a little.
Keep up the good work ^^
17Rayne LoganWow... that's pretty weird that you just reviewed my story... you psychic or something? :P
I was just reading yours - Once Upon A Time.. You Belonged - and I must say its pretty good. ^^ The only thing I'm not too sure about is the use of 2nd person... the "You", it's a good change for a story, and gets the reader involved in the plot, but after a while, it might get a little tedious.
I love the plot though. And I can actually relate to the characters, as can quite a lot of people, I have a younger sibling myself, and yes... I did get ignored when she was younger, and I still do a little.
Keep up the good work ^^