for Blue Crayon12/11/2007 c1 
612simpleplan13
interesting.. I wasn't expecting the ending.. I like the idea of the idea of him coloring the walls.. and how something that was seemingly horrible was actually good... the only thing is that one line in the last stanza seems a bit too long to fit with the flow..
612simpleplan13interesting.. I wasn't expecting the ending.. I like the idea of the idea of him coloring the walls.. and how something that was seemingly horrible was actually good... the only thing is that one line in the last stanza seems a bit too long to fit with the flow..
3/11/2007 c1 13herpius derpius7
I'm really awed by this, and the title and relation to crayons, in my opinion, adds to its power. I read your Black Crayon poem, too, and that was amazing as well. (:
13herpius derpius7I'm really awed by this, and the title and relation to crayons, in my opinion, adds to its power. I read your Black Crayon poem, too, and that was amazing as well. (:
8/28/2006 c1 37TaltushMeiMei
Wow, this is really good, cool, and any synonym. Meaning, it's great. It's a little creepy too, which is awesome. What I really like is the way the stanzas are broken. It has a good flow.
37TaltushMeiMeiWow, this is really good, cool, and any synonym. Meaning, it's great. It's a little creepy too, which is awesome. What I really like is the way the stanzas are broken. It has a good flow.
8/25/2006 c1 18Plinky
That's really cute. I actually really, really like this. It's a lovely idea. Made me smile. ;)
Keep writing!
18PlinkyThat's really cute. I actually really, really like this. It's a lovely idea. Made me smile. ;)
Keep writing!
8/10/2006 c1 13Mr.Satire
Nice prose! Very creative subject. I had a dream once that I could breathe underwater. Those superhuman power dreams are great. Very determined kid to be focused enough to crayon his entire room blue.
13Mr.SatireNice prose! Very creative subject. I had a dream once that I could breathe underwater. Those superhuman power dreams are great. Very determined kid to be focused enough to crayon his entire room blue.
7/11/2006 c1 WhyCannotIdeleteaFPAccount
Another crayon poem. Very good. Black represents his soul, and blue represents the ocean, his home. This was awesome. I don't quite understand how it would relate to a person, as in I don't see the metaphor, but then again perhaps there is no metaphor. Maybe it's simply a truth put into poem. Keep writing!
Another crayon poem. Very good. Black represents his soul, and blue represents the ocean, his home. This was awesome. I don't quite understand how it would relate to a person, as in I don't see the metaphor, but then again perhaps there is no metaphor. Maybe it's simply a truth put into poem. Keep writing!
7/7/2006 c1 46Former Kimmi Gray
Oh I liked this a lot. Very well done.
Also, thanks very much for the review. I was going for something different hehe.
46Former Kimmi GrayOh I liked this a lot. Very well done.
Also, thanks very much for the review. I was going for something different hehe.