for boy with soul10/8/2007 c1 she smolders
I want to meet him now more than ever after reading this. Just oh so amazing and each word leaves a shrap impression on my mind. Take care.
I want to meet him now more than ever after reading this. Just oh so amazing and each word leaves a shrap impression on my mind. Take care.
7/22/2006 c1 
78acrobia
This poem was awsome, it is sentimental and very well written - both the style and the message that your writing portrays are beautiful.
"if you lit him up you'd see his insides,transparentveins like roots and branches,a tree searching for stars"- Such a wonderful line, I could see the image, the veins growing to the tips of the fingers, such an amaizing picture!
"I would be his diary, he could fill me uppage after page and I'd never get tiredin a messy inky scrawl he'd spill his soullike the ink spots I drop on the floor when I draw" - So lovely, the way they both help each other out, in such an unexpected way. It was a lovely, delicate image. Very well writen.
"I'd be weightless for him alone
I wanna meet a boy with a soul" - this is so deep, I think it was a perfect way to end the poem, it is powerful, it leaves a feeling in the reader that is both melancolic and beautiful at the same time.
I also think the way you rhyme in this poem makes it even better, makes it more delicate and rymthmic, a very good choice of words and of style. Lovely piece!xo - Acrobia
78acrobiaThis poem was awsome, it is sentimental and very well written - both the style and the message that your writing portrays are beautiful.
"if you lit him up you'd see his insides,transparentveins like roots and branches,a tree searching for stars"- Such a wonderful line, I could see the image, the veins growing to the tips of the fingers, such an amaizing picture!
"I would be his diary, he could fill me uppage after page and I'd never get tiredin a messy inky scrawl he'd spill his soullike the ink spots I drop on the floor when I draw" - So lovely, the way they both help each other out, in such an unexpected way. It was a lovely, delicate image. Very well writen.
"I'd be weightless for him alone
I wanna meet a boy with a soul" - this is so deep, I think it was a perfect way to end the poem, it is powerful, it leaves a feeling in the reader that is both melancolic and beautiful at the same time.
I also think the way you rhyme in this poem makes it even better, makes it more delicate and rymthmic, a very good choice of words and of style. Lovely piece!xo - Acrobia
7/22/2006 c1 a lonely september
this was so sweet. i love the longing in this poem, it's written out so well. :)
this was so sweet. i love the longing in this poem, it's written out so well. :)
7/13/2006 c1 77by His blood
i was so glad to see you'd updated - i absolutely love your writing, it's amazing. this is no exception - it's just so beautiful. 'i want a boy/if you lit him up you'd see his insides,/transparent/veins like roots and branches/a tree searching for stars/spilling upwards to his fingertips' - that was my favorite part, but all of this is so perfect.
77by His bloodi was so glad to see you'd updated - i absolutely love your writing, it's amazing. this is no exception - it's just so beautiful. 'i want a boy/if you lit him up you'd see his insides,/transparent/veins like roots and branches/a tree searching for stars/spilling upwards to his fingertips' - that was my favorite part, but all of this is so perfect.
7/13/2006 c1 1k+Faithless Juliet
"I would be his diary, he could fill me uppage after page and I'd never get tired" - I love those lines; this is such a striking and eclectic creation. It really has a strong heart beat of its own on the page, and I love the idea of being filled up by something. Thanks for all your reviews lately and keep up the good work, don't go so long until updating again.
Much love,Juliet.
1k+Faithless Juliet"I would be his diary, he could fill me uppage after page and I'd never get tired" - I love those lines; this is such a striking and eclectic creation. It really has a strong heart beat of its own on the page, and I love the idea of being filled up by something. Thanks for all your reviews lately and keep up the good work, don't go so long until updating again.
Much love,Juliet.
7/12/2006 c1 erised i
i love this. particularly, "every inch of me would be his secret / written in stone". there's something so appealing about the entire poem.
i love this. particularly, "every inch of me would be his secret / written in stone". there's something so appealing about the entire poem.