9/22/2006 c10 28Lyrical.Love
I can't wait for more!

9/21/2006 c10 4Gilly Bean2
Not a whole lot going on in this chapter. But that is all right, because sometimes you need that to push the story on.

I do know that it is fairly easy to go for a day without food by drinking things, because I have done it. Not really on purpose, it just sort of worked out that all I had was coffee for a day. Needless to say, I was shaky and moody. I also participated in a 48-hour fast another time (it really helped open my eyes to starvation and poverty around the world), and that was pretty hard to cope with because I have a naturally fast metabolism. And that was only two days. It gave me a whole new appreciation for Muslim's during the month of Ramadan, as well. They cannot ingest anything, not even water. Just, wow.

Just a little thing, but you said her parents had artificial insemination, and I think what you meant was that they had a surrogate mother. Artificial insemination is simply an introduction of semen to the oviduct by way of a syringe, or in other words without sexual contact. Now, they would have to perform in vitro fertilization (where the egg is fertilized outside of the body and then implanted into the uterus) for a surrogate mother, which is a form of artificial insemination. But the way you have the sentence written it is not clear. Although, I cannot think of many women who would be a surrogate for a couple that is fully capable of having a child, just too vain to do so.

I suppose another little thing I found questionable is that it took Robin's mother 2 years to get rid of the weight she put on during pregnancy. One of my best friends had twins, and she had lost all of her pregnancy weight about five or six months after they were born. And she did it by eating healthy and exercising. For someone as vain as Robin's mom, I would think she would have starved herself skinny if she had to. It just seems an out of character act.

The whole thing with her mom baffles me still, because, while my mom and I have a great relationship, and always have, there were quite a number of years where my father and I did not get along at all after he and my mom divorced. And during those years, I never cared much what he thought of me. He could have said I was the ugliest, fattest, dumbest person in the universe and I would have shrugged and kept on going. I am thankful that he never said anything like that, and also that we have a much improved relationship now.

Well, until next chapter!

-Gilly Bean

9/21/2006 c10 icedfaerie
Eh, sorry I didn't review the previous chapter, was a little occupied. Anyway, great chapter, I really feel sorry for Robin, and about the whole eating thing does that really happen if you don't eat?

Anyway, I saw the pictures in your profile and OMG Don is just so hott, can't wait until the next chapter.

9/21/2006 c10 2My Sweetheart the Drunk
GACK! i'm sorry, i'm sorry!

actually, what you suggested in your review would be greatly appreciated. if you could do me the huge favor of reading over a chapter or something and letting me know what you think might need to be changed would be hugely appreciated by yours truly.

i've just finished editing chapter 1, and i must say, i think it's a huge improvement...so now i'll do that for the rest of the chapters...goody.

ok, so now for your story -

cute chapter, although the whole don/robin awkwardness bothered me. WHEN IS SHE GOING TO REALIZE HE'S IN LOVE WITH HER!

grr. i hate oblivious charachters.

gr.

9/17/2006 c3 5anacharlie
Don seems so adorable. =)

9/16/2006 c1 2StrawberryStarburst
Robin seems like a person a lot of people can identify with. Good storyline. Keep going.

9/8/2006 c9 shhsilence
update soon i love itgood story ideapoor girl