for It's not Okay7/17/2006 c4 
5taladraco
Well I like it so far. Just those few things I pointed out, but other than that... It reads well. Interesting topic.
Can't wait to finish it.
5taladracoWell I like it so far. Just those few things I pointed out, but other than that... It reads well. Interesting topic.
Can't wait to finish it.
7/17/2006 c3 taladraco
It's chapter 3! You started by saying Susan, then switched to Kelly. You might want to fix that. (Unless they are the same person (: )
It's chapter 3! You started by saying Susan, then switched to Kelly. You might want to fix that. (Unless they are the same person (: )
7/17/2006 c2 taladraco
This bit was a bit hard to follow. Not sure if it's just me. Also, you started in first person POV then switched to third person. That was weird.
Other than that, it is good so far. I'm only up to chapter two, so you may find another review from me. :)
This bit was a bit hard to follow. Not sure if it's just me. Also, you started in first person POV then switched to third person. That was weird.
Other than that, it is good so far. I'm only up to chapter two, so you may find another review from me. :)