for Stranded12/11/2006 c10 
4marikamaroca
nice
i like it
but did you have to leave it as a clif hanger?'
write more soon
~marika
4marikamarocanice
i like it
but did you have to leave it as a clif hanger?'
write more soon
~marika
12/8/2006 c10 toxic-noodle725
uh that was kinda fast. update!
uh that was kinda fast. update!
12/8/2006 c10 24DancingChaChaFruit
Aw... your welcome =)
I think I did this in the last review, but I'm doing it again: OH! MY! GOSH! This chapter was so suspenseful! A few grammatical errors, but whatever. Actually, I have one very, VERy nit-picky thing to point out.
"His arm tightened on her waist in a bone crushing embrace." I personally don't recommend the use of the word 'embrace.' It has a positive connotation, like a symbol of affection, as opposed to the suspenseful, tumultuous scene layed out in this chapter.
Like I said, nit-picky. This chapter overall was great. It was SO suspenseful. I was seriously on the edge of my seat.
So... yeah. Update soon. Please. I'm dying to find out what happens next, even if Steve is already dead.
Until the next review! =)
24DancingChaChaFruitAw... your welcome =)
I think I did this in the last review, but I'm doing it again: OH! MY! GOSH! This chapter was so suspenseful! A few grammatical errors, but whatever. Actually, I have one very, VERy nit-picky thing to point out.
"His arm tightened on her waist in a bone crushing embrace." I personally don't recommend the use of the word 'embrace.' It has a positive connotation, like a symbol of affection, as opposed to the suspenseful, tumultuous scene layed out in this chapter.
Like I said, nit-picky. This chapter overall was great. It was SO suspenseful. I was seriously on the edge of my seat.
So... yeah. Update soon. Please. I'm dying to find out what happens next, even if Steve is already dead.
Until the next review! =)
12/8/2006 c10 19jekodama
OH MY GOD! (runs around, screaming like a mad woman) OH MY GOD! OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OHMYGOD OHMYGODOHMYGODOHMYGOD! COREY KILLED STEVE? COREY KILLED STEVE! OH MY GOD! now it's YOUR OBLIGATION TO UPDATE AS SOON AS INHUMANLY POSSIBLE!
OH MY GOD!
19jekodamaOH MY GOD! (runs around, screaming like a mad woman) OH MY GOD! OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OHMYGOD OHMYGODOHMYGODOHMYGOD! COREY KILLED STEVE? COREY KILLED STEVE! OH MY GOD! now it's YOUR OBLIGATION TO UPDATE AS SOON AS INHUMANLY POSSIBLE!
OH MY GOD!
11/27/2006 c9 24DancingChaChaFruit
Um. Okay. I did NOT get an author alert for this. Something odd has been going on with the emails I'm supposed to get from FicionPress. Like I came back from vacation yesterday, and there there were all of them for a week, just kind of chilling in my inbox.
But whatever. My initial reaction upon finishing this chapter was as follows:
OH! MY! GOSH! I mean, I knew Steve was a sketchball and all, but I didn't know he was THAT sketchy.
GREAT plot by the way. If I was interested before, than I'm practically obsessed now.
I'm not sure if I've mentioned this before, but you don't exactly write in paragraph form. Sometimes you do, and sometimes it's just one sentence followed by a new sentence in a new paragraph. I'd fix it up if I were you, but I'm not you, so yeah.
Ugh. I can't believe you'd leave me in suspense like this. Seriously. I'm going to pull my hair out in frustration if you don't update soon. =P
So, please. Update as quickly as you can! =D
24DancingChaChaFruitUm. Okay. I did NOT get an author alert for this. Something odd has been going on with the emails I'm supposed to get from FicionPress. Like I came back from vacation yesterday, and there there were all of them for a week, just kind of chilling in my inbox.
But whatever. My initial reaction upon finishing this chapter was as follows:
OH! MY! GOSH! I mean, I knew Steve was a sketchball and all, but I didn't know he was THAT sketchy.
GREAT plot by the way. If I was interested before, than I'm practically obsessed now.
I'm not sure if I've mentioned this before, but you don't exactly write in paragraph form. Sometimes you do, and sometimes it's just one sentence followed by a new sentence in a new paragraph. I'd fix it up if I were you, but I'm not you, so yeah.
Ugh. I can't believe you'd leave me in suspense like this. Seriously. I'm going to pull my hair out in frustration if you don't update soon. =P
So, please. Update as quickly as you can! =D
11/21/2006 c9 renworth
wow! talk about suspense! you'd better update soon and i mean SOON! i love how everything is coming together now, this is such a well put together plot. thanks for brightening my day and i'm expecting chapter 10 in one week max!
wow! talk about suspense! you'd better update soon and i mean SOON! i love how everything is coming together now, this is such a well put together plot. thanks for brightening my day and i'm expecting chapter 10 in one week max!
11/19/2006 c9 19jekodama
OH MY GOD! I knew the guy was a freak, but I never saw THAT one coming! UPDATE SOON!
19jekodamaOH MY GOD! I knew the guy was a freak, but I never saw THAT one coming! UPDATE SOON!
11/18/2006 c9 toxic-noodle725
u've got a bad habit of leaving off in cliffhangers. gr.
u've got a bad habit of leaving off in cliffhangers. gr.
11/17/2006 c9 Yuki's Hachi
I love it! I just started reading it and i'm sad now i've reached the end of the story so far. Plz update soon. I love how it's got the right amout of detail. I love their little relationship is going, and the compitition and the possible bad guy and now the mystery of the murfers of the skelotons. Keep up the great work. And update real soon Plz! lol
I love it! I just started reading it and i'm sad now i've reached the end of the story so far. Plz update soon. I love how it's got the right amout of detail. I love their little relationship is going, and the compitition and the possible bad guy and now the mystery of the murfers of the skelotons. Keep up the great work. And update real soon Plz! lol
11/16/2006 c9 Kella
Hey, I love your story! I just got through reading chapter 8 And I can't wait to see where it's leading to,
your new reader Kella.
Hey, I love your story! I just got through reading chapter 8 And I can't wait to see where it's leading to,
your new reader Kella.
10/22/2006 c8 24DancingChaChaFruit
Well, I liked this chapter better than the last one, if you must know. Wait... did I review the last chapter? Please tell me I did. I THOUGHT I did. I swear I did! And I...
didn't. Darn.
Well, anyway, I like this little mystery/romance thing that's going on at the same time. Steve is definately a sketchy character. What's his deal? Gah, I can't wait to find everything out. I hate suspense _
In the meanwhile... um... write more. A lot more. ;) And update soon!
Until the next review! =)
24DancingChaChaFruitWell, I liked this chapter better than the last one, if you must know. Wait... did I review the last chapter? Please tell me I did. I THOUGHT I did. I swear I did! And I...
didn't. Darn.
Well, anyway, I like this little mystery/romance thing that's going on at the same time. Steve is definately a sketchy character. What's his deal? Gah, I can't wait to find everything out. I hate suspense _
In the meanwhile... um... write more. A lot more. ;) And update soon!
Until the next review! =)
10/19/2006 c8 19toxic-noodle725
bout time! so this chapter raises alot of questions...hopefully u'll answer them sometime soon?
19toxic-noodle725bout time! so this chapter raises alot of questions...hopefully u'll answer them sometime soon?