for Stranded9/4/2006 c6 renworth
Good Lord nashgurl you are even less mature then I thought. Ladiebug well done though I thought anacondas were brown? Anyways I like this chapter, the snake bit was well written, and how ominous to nearly die on your 16th birth day. The 20 questions scene was entertaining and Mia's most embarrassing moment was very creative. I hope to hear more of Steve in the next chapter and more about this life jacket conspiracy. Update soon!
Good Lord nashgurl you are even less mature then I thought. Ladiebug well done though I thought anacondas were brown? Anyways I like this chapter, the snake bit was well written, and how ominous to nearly die on your 16th birth day. The 20 questions scene was entertaining and Mia's most embarrassing moment was very creative. I hope to hear more of Steve in the next chapter and more about this life jacket conspiracy. Update soon!
8/28/2006 c6 ktspakiti
woa exciting! one thing that bugged me was you kept spelling you're your... sorry i have friends and relitives who are grammar freaks so yeah. but otherwise it was really awesome! i just had to read To Kill a Mockingbird for my summer reading! i thought it was gonna be so boring but it was actually pretty good. please update soon this is awesome! ^.^
woa exciting! one thing that bugged me was you kept spelling you're your... sorry i have friends and relitives who are grammar freaks so yeah. but otherwise it was really awesome! i just had to read To Kill a Mockingbird for my summer reading! i thought it was gonna be so boring but it was actually pretty good. please update soon this is awesome! ^.^
8/28/2006 c6 
19jekodama
An ANACONDA! Wow, woman, you're mean! LOL!
Great chapter! I hate Kyla, btw... LOL!
Until the next review!
19jekodamaAn ANACONDA! Wow, woman, you're mean! LOL!
Great chapter! I hate Kyla, btw... LOL!
Until the next review!
8/27/2006 c6 1cath2356
oh. That sounds like a very bad start to a bad birthday. The whole anaconda scene gives me shivers up my spine.
Corey was so cute in this chapter. Aww. I want Mia and him to get together really soon. By the way I think steve is really freaky. I was thoughrowly creeped out by him!
Update soon!
Cathy
1cath2356oh. That sounds like a very bad start to a bad birthday. The whole anaconda scene gives me shivers up my spine.
Corey was so cute in this chapter. Aww. I want Mia and him to get together really soon. By the way I think steve is really freaky. I was thoughrowly creeped out by him!
Update soon!
Cathy
8/27/2006 c6 6SL Peckham
Wow I just love your story, it's so fun to read and I'm excited for more! (and that's alright for the name spelling thing)
6SL PeckhamWow I just love your story, it's so fun to read and I'm excited for more! (and that's alright for the name spelling thing)
8/27/2006 c6 24DancingChaChaFruit
Hello again! Mia sounds a lot like me, actually, with all the bookish-ness and not doing anything bad. Hehe.
There were some "your" instead of "you're" mistakes in this chaper. Think of it this way: "you're" means "you are," while "your" indicates posession. For example, you'd say "You are pretty," but you'd never say "You are hair is pretty."
I don't like Kyla. She sounds like one of those hoity-toity snobs that people in general tend to dislike.
Poor Mia! Almost killed on her birthday! =(
Ah, brown hair. Hehe. Corey sounds like a cutie ;)
Update soon!
24DancingChaChaFruitHello again! Mia sounds a lot like me, actually, with all the bookish-ness and not doing anything bad. Hehe.
There were some "your" instead of "you're" mistakes in this chaper. Think of it this way: "you're" means "you are," while "your" indicates posession. For example, you'd say "You are pretty," but you'd never say "You are hair is pretty."
I don't like Kyla. She sounds like one of those hoity-toity snobs that people in general tend to dislike.
Poor Mia! Almost killed on her birthday! =(
Ah, brown hair. Hehe. Corey sounds like a cutie ;)
Update soon!
8/27/2006 c6 toxic-noodle725
for some odd reason ur story (well the tropicalness) reminds me of one of those herbal essesnce/garnier fructise shampoo comercials...minus the annoying ditz, killer snakes, and panicked teens...yea. so update soon.
for some odd reason ur story (well the tropicalness) reminds me of one of those herbal essesnce/garnier fructise shampoo comercials...minus the annoying ditz, killer snakes, and panicked teens...yea. so update soon.
8/27/2006 c6 T'bite me
whoa. an aconda? i would never forget my birthday if i was pulled underneath. omg so fresky. nice story.
whoa. an aconda? i would never forget my birthday if i was pulled underneath. omg so fresky. nice story.
8/19/2006 c1 nashgurl
to cauliflour:
my dear old fish, go and boil your head.hugs and kisses,
nashgurl
P.S. sophia hurry up and update
to cauliflour:
my dear old fish, go and boil your head.hugs and kisses,
nashgurl
P.S. sophia hurry up and update
8/12/2006 c5 24DancingChaChaFruit
Me again. I meant to say this in my last review and forgot: thanks for all the reviews you left on my various writings.
The story is still very good, but there are a few things I can point out. You have some grammar errors here and there, like "to" instead of "too," "their" instead of "they're," "too" instead of "two," and "where" instead of "were." All understandable mistakes.
Just wondering, but did you ever mention the color of Corey's hair? I know he had brown eyes, but yeah.
Still a great story. I'll definately keep reading. (You'll keep updating, right?) =)
24DancingChaChaFruitMe again. I meant to say this in my last review and forgot: thanks for all the reviews you left on my various writings.
The story is still very good, but there are a few things I can point out. You have some grammar errors here and there, like "to" instead of "too," "their" instead of "they're," "too" instead of "two," and "where" instead of "were." All understandable mistakes.
Just wondering, but did you ever mention the color of Corey's hair? I know he had brown eyes, but yeah.
Still a great story. I'll definately keep reading. (You'll keep updating, right?) =)
8/12/2006 c1 DancingChaChaFruit
Ooh, great stuff. Very descriptive. I could almost (or maybe completely) see things in my mind.
While reading this, though, I couldn't help but wonder if you'd ever been on a cruise before, because I noticed some things that may be inaccurate. Rooms on cruise ships are usually below all the decks and stuff, so it's highly doubtful Mia would be able to see the main deck from her porthole. Next, you don't really get TV channels on a cruise ship, because you're out in the middle of the ocean. There are usually about four channels, each playing a movie. And finally, there would most likely be a life jacket in her room. I think it's some sort of law, but even if it's not I'm almost positive they would all have some in each room.
Okay, so those above things are pretty insignificant, but I thought I'd point it out. I probably won't review again until the last chapter you've got posted. Great work here, though.
Ooh, great stuff. Very descriptive. I could almost (or maybe completely) see things in my mind.
While reading this, though, I couldn't help but wonder if you'd ever been on a cruise before, because I noticed some things that may be inaccurate. Rooms on cruise ships are usually below all the decks and stuff, so it's highly doubtful Mia would be able to see the main deck from her porthole. Next, you don't really get TV channels on a cruise ship, because you're out in the middle of the ocean. There are usually about four channels, each playing a movie. And finally, there would most likely be a life jacket in her room. I think it's some sort of law, but even if it's not I'm almost positive they would all have some in each room.
Okay, so those above things are pretty insignificant, but I thought I'd point it out. I probably won't review again until the last chapter you've got posted. Great work here, though.
8/12/2006 c5 renworth
my dear nashgurl,i think you have some nerve wasting space talking about yourself like that. this section is for reviews not places to compliment oneself. i would be obliged if you didn't in the future. thank you. ladie bird i've really enjoyed your story so far. steve sounds like a very curious character. i like how you take time to describe the surroundings not to just simply state that mia/kyla/corey/steve is on the beach or in the jungle. keep up the good work. i am looking forward to your next update.
my dear nashgurl,i think you have some nerve wasting space talking about yourself like that. this section is for reviews not places to compliment oneself. i would be obliged if you didn't in the future. thank you. ladie bird i've really enjoyed your story so far. steve sounds like a very curious character. i like how you take time to describe the surroundings not to just simply state that mia/kyla/corey/steve is on the beach or in the jungle. keep up the good work. i am looking forward to your next update.
8/7/2006 c5 nashgurl
dear ladiebirdthis renny person sounds like a really kind intelligent gorgeous funny and basically just awesome person! jk! thanx for mentioning me sophia, but if you dont finish this story then you know what the consequenses will be. (they involve gloves, a ribcage and a hat) sometimes i wonder if i'm best friends with a 20 year famous author old or even a child genius. your characters are really beleivable, i laughed out loud when i read what was on kyla's shirt. you'd better not be one of those writers who takes forever to update or else! (see above) P.S. cc is an idiot and im going to write that over and over untill i recover from shock!
dear ladiebirdthis renny person sounds like a really kind intelligent gorgeous funny and basically just awesome person! jk! thanx for mentioning me sophia, but if you dont finish this story then you know what the consequenses will be. (they involve gloves, a ribcage and a hat) sometimes i wonder if i'm best friends with a 20 year famous author old or even a child genius. your characters are really beleivable, i laughed out loud when i read what was on kyla's shirt. you'd better not be one of those writers who takes forever to update or else! (see above) P.S. cc is an idiot and im going to write that over and over untill i recover from shock!