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8/28/2006 c1 12Panicking With Hesitation
love the last 2 lines.
7/27/2006 c1 879Moondog Dozier
"the observer-could some day rise high enough to hit the ground harder", is marvelous phrasework. Unique imagery, with a real philosophical depth. I like the sparseness of this. Goes from specifics to abstract generalities well, and sustains the tone well throughout. I rather like this one. It captures a feeling that is hard to describe. Good work.
7/27/2006 c1 63silentscreamer07
wow..i thought this was really good! Did you not like this? I LOVED IT...there was a lot of meaning that someone can get from this...

"..some day rise high enough to hit the ground harder."

Loved that line...I'm not sure why, it's just the line that stood out the most. This is really great writing. It seems like it could've been a bit longer...i felt like i wanted to keep reading more to it..but either way..i really liked this *keep writing* you've got talent!

~britney

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