for The Tip of an Iceberg3/17/2010 c7 Butterflies
I love it :) its crazy and amazing
I love it :) its crazy and amazing
2/28/2007 c4 
19Serom Kim
Hmm ... why didn't I review this chapter?
Anyway, I thought about it for a while since this could be your own unique writing style, and I'm not sure if you do it on your other stories, but this is a bit too erratic. As in people say something, and there's another short paragraph, or one word, or you don't know who said what. It's a little hard to read. Also, I would highly advise against making author's notes take up a LOT of space on the story.
Also, on your review for chapter three of Shuichi's World, I didn't know there was a character named Yuuri in Gravitation. I just know that the anime exists, I know nothing about it. I just used the names my friend used, and that includes Sasuke. Sorry, I'll go change that.
19Serom KimHmm ... why didn't I review this chapter?
Anyway, I thought about it for a while since this could be your own unique writing style, and I'm not sure if you do it on your other stories, but this is a bit too erratic. As in people say something, and there's another short paragraph, or one word, or you don't know who said what. It's a little hard to read. Also, I would highly advise against making author's notes take up a LOT of space on the story.
Also, on your review for chapter three of Shuichi's World, I didn't know there was a character named Yuuri in Gravitation. I just know that the anime exists, I know nothing about it. I just used the names my friend used, and that includes Sasuke. Sorry, I'll go change that.
11/15/2006 c7 Serom Kim
That's a cool chapter. I guess that's the end of what you've written? Write more!
That's a cool chapter. I guess that's the end of what you've written? Write more!
11/15/2006 c5 Serom Kim
I like the way the speaker goes randomly thinking about stuff and goes off on a tangent. I do that when I think as well. It's realistic.
I like the way the speaker goes randomly thinking about stuff and goes off on a tangent. I do that when I think as well. It's realistic.
11/15/2006 c3 Serom Kim
We're now introduced to Jay, a character whom I hadn't heard about before. It's interesting. Keep up the good work!
We're now introduced to Jay, a character whom I hadn't heard about before. It's interesting. Keep up the good work!
11/14/2006 c2 Serom Kim
The first part was a little confusing. I couldn't understand what was happening as much, but the rest of it was funny. The dialogue is funny because it sounds like something real people would say in that situation. I'll review the rest tomorrow. My eyes are getting tired. Great chapter!
The first part was a little confusing. I couldn't understand what was happening as much, but the rest of it was funny. The dialogue is funny because it sounds like something real people would say in that situation. I'll review the rest tomorrow. My eyes are getting tired. Great chapter!
11/14/2006 c1 Serom Kim
Hey, thanks for reading my story. I appreciate it. And your story is funny, too.
The part about the daggers I couldn't understand too well (throwing darts or real daggers, maybe) but the conversation was funny. It's interesting when you don't give the characters away, who said what. But I stil don't know the girl's name right now. I suppose I'll find out later, right? Good chapter!
Hey, thanks for reading my story. I appreciate it. And your story is funny, too.
The part about the daggers I couldn't understand too well (throwing darts or real daggers, maybe) but the conversation was funny. It's interesting when you don't give the characters away, who said what. But I stil don't know the girl's name right now. I suppose I'll find out later, right? Good chapter!
8/16/2006 c1 Miss-Nina
Ooh! Awesome I love your story. I'll be back soon to read chapter two. Your main character is awesome. Yes...
Ooh! Awesome I love your story. I'll be back soon to read chapter two. Your main character is awesome. Yes...
8/1/2006 c1 39EmoAssassin
I love yur little conversations at the beginning and end! very creative! I like the plot! Keep writing, i want to know more about the chars!
39EmoAssassinI love yur little conversations at the beginning and end! very creative! I like the plot! Keep writing, i want to know more about the chars!