for kain Hart6/13/2007 c1 
8the Berserker
This is in return for reviewing Clubbing at Fifteen, for which I am eternally grateful :D
I don't really understand why you put this story in your profile, too. It's a shame 'cause I read your profile first, so this is exactly the same...
Too short, and I don't think you understand the benefits of a comma, but not too bad. A good idea, you just didn't write it to the effect I expected of the plotline.
Still, I like it :)
8the BerserkerThis is in return for reviewing Clubbing at Fifteen, for which I am eternally grateful :D
I don't really understand why you put this story in your profile, too. It's a shame 'cause I read your profile first, so this is exactly the same...
Too short, and I don't think you understand the benefits of a comma, but not too bad. A good idea, you just didn't write it to the effect I expected of the plotline.
Still, I like it :)