for Untitled Memoir8/6/2006 c1 
73Jezsh
I like the way this is written, especially the second paragraph. Seems to express very well how a split second moment, something seemingly inconsequential, can have a huge effect on someone. One thing I didn't really like was the brackets in the first paragraph...I think there are too many and I found they interrupted the flow of the writing a little bit.Nice work anyway.
73JezshI like the way this is written, especially the second paragraph. Seems to express very well how a split second moment, something seemingly inconsequential, can have a huge effect on someone. One thing I didn't really like was the brackets in the first paragraph...I think there are too many and I found they interrupted the flow of the writing a little bit.Nice work anyway.