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4/5/2013 c1 4GrangerDanger333
Noooooooooo! It ended sadly. :( Well, I guess it had to because I wasn't expecting it work out, but still.. oh dear. Did we (intentionally) not find out the narrator's name? Nice. Anyway, this left me feeling sad and also pitying the narrator. He was pretty stupid, naive, thinking he could just help Snow. And a lot of what he said showed how naive he was too. Now, NOT to be offensive, but that was kinda the way he was brought up all religious and not having sex before marriage etc. that made him like that. Hmmm, well it was a very interesting (and steamy) but sad story! Good job :D
5/18/2010 c1 liyasha
Love your story - it's very poignant. The protagonist is really sweet and innocent while Snow is, well, Snow. There seems to be a lot more going on which you hint at and I would like to see a continuation of this story. =)
1/20/2010 c1 1CinderellaWithCombatBoots
...Wow. It's amazing. Snow is freaking awesome, and I loved the whole thing. Wished it was longer than a one-shot, as I truly believe this could be extended into a fully-fledged story, if you had the time or want, or whatever. I wonder if things had of gone differently if...wait. What's his name? Is it mentioned, and I've forgotten it, or was it not said? Anyways...let's call him 'Bob' for the time-being. As I was saying, I wonder if it'd have gone differently if Bob hadn't brought up the fact he was a virgin to light. I can imagine they would have. I loved the story a lot :]
5/2/2007 c1 2tricksy
Your reviews of my story have compelled me to sign back in to Ficpress and update (which I will do shortly - tomorrow ish I guess).

But anyway, I didn't realize at first that you were the person who wrote this! I read it a while ago and never reviewed (yeah, I'm on of THOSE people - at least, when I'm feeling lazy). But I liked/like it. A lot. You made it original (the ending was perfect). And your style is excellent.

(:
4/29/2007 c1 31emptyword
A rare gem; I love this. Your writing flowed and molded, harnessing the narrator's thoughts into a bizarrely sad yet adorable perspective. One can't help feeling terrible for the poor man, child-like in his blindness and ignorance, and just terribly helpless for the whole situation as it is. A magnificent portrayal, one I will have to favorite.

I think I've read some of your RuroKen fanfictions some years ago. "History Behind a History," right?
4/15/2007 c1 4Amindaya
Wow. The whole time, I was thinking: that poor guy, this is't going to end how he wants it to. And then it didn't. So sad.
3/22/2007 c1 15x-kit-x
I was amazed at how naive he was, even as an adult...but it was good nonetheless and made it all the more ... I don't really know what word i'm looking for but definately something positive. I wish this wasn't a oneshot and that it continued... i'd love to read more about Snow and his "stalker" hehe.
10/1/2006 c1 Patient607-9912
That was awesome! Snow kiks ass! Too bad it had to end like that :( *sad* But Cool! I likes your writing.
8/26/2006 c1 random
great writing, great story, very cool ending. Especially your end message..."Snow does it, therefore it's cool. So there." HAHA! That was great.I loved the descriptions and the pacing, though sometimes you went too in depth to what the dude was thinking that it got a bit dry and boring several times (in fact, I skipped some parts and found that I didn't really need to read them anyway, since I was able to understand the situation clearly from the later descriptions). I'm not trying to bash your writing r anything, just giving some advice, because overall you're pretty good at describing minute things that make this story believable (i.e. the pink umbrella). keep up the cool work.
8/13/2006 c1 Luciver
Wonderful. Absolutely wonderful. And a tad bit heart breaking too. Snow...they could have a happy ending, ya know. Although the narrator must have just seemed like an obsessed innocent to Snow. Very sad. But, great job. I'm going to go read your other stories now.
8/6/2006 c1 4SerialXLain
:hugs you hard:

OH MY GOODNESS! This made my night. ;-;

I love you.

And I love Snow. The whole time I just kept thinking that he probably had no feelings attatched at all...I mean he's a prostitute.

I like how the narrator had that kind of stalker appeal to him...the watching and the jealousy and planning a future for the two of them...

I was amazed at how naive he is. :shakes head:

Your ending made me feel that pressured feeling in my head...the one where I want to cry. XD Thanks a bunch pshaw.

Overall: this was so pretty and emotional and I love you. You're my hero.

LOVE!
8/6/2006 c1 2Marylyn-Mercy
Very nicely written!
8/6/2006 c1 maho.shojo
Is there more to this? o_Ohaha, glad you advocate safe sex.

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