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8/20/2006 c1 19Ashl3y5991
i like the descriptiveness of this. When i read it, i felt like i was truly under so much pressure to get away. Good job
8/16/2006 c1 54kaylajac
Ooh, I like this. My favorite part was the bit in italics, and overall the poem was very emotional. Nice work. The only advice I have is that, in places, the rhythm is thrown off by lines that are too short and long- a little tweaking of your line breaks could fix it. Once again, nice poem!
8/14/2006 c1 92q is for quirks
that was really good, i liked it, and it's so easy to relate to. it sucks when you're seen as "so-and-so's brother" or "insert-name's daughter", you know what i mean. that's what i'm pretty sure you were talking about in this, if not, sorry, that's what it sounded like. anyways, great job, and thanks for the reviews, too!

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