for August12/5/2006 c1 
31none of burt's beeswax
oohh, i like this one. funny thing, it got me thinking, and i've never had a relationship relationship begin in august, but a couple notable ones did end in august. anyway, i really liked the idea and nice job on keeping the rhythm up throughout the poem.
31none of burt's beeswaxoohh, i like this one. funny thing, it got me thinking, and i've never had a relationship relationship begin in august, but a couple notable ones did end in august. anyway, i really liked the idea and nice job on keeping the rhythm up throughout the poem.
9/10/2006 c1 237classic violet
wonderful.
"August
Has a way of souring things.
Like the dark corners of bodies,
Like crabapples, rotting above,
Like milk,
Like you and me.
Curdled and rancid, past expiration,
It’s easy to loose that sweetness.
Soured in August."
those lines especially were magnificent, you've given august such an expression, it's lovely.
237classic violetwonderful.
"August
Has a way of souring things.
Like the dark corners of bodies,
Like crabapples, rotting above,
Like milk,
Like you and me.
Curdled and rancid, past expiration,
It’s easy to loose that sweetness.
Soured in August."
those lines especially were magnificent, you've given august such an expression, it's lovely.
8/10/2006 c1 9alittlebitabsurd
Oh, wow, I like. Especially all the similies. Too many can be overkill, but these work, I guess because they're appropriate and original.
"coagulated Jello-air"-my favorite one
I like the form, too.
Yay. :)
9alittlebitabsurdOh, wow, I like. Especially all the similies. Too many can be overkill, but these work, I guess because they're appropriate and original.
"coagulated Jello-air"-my favorite one
I like the form, too.
Yay. :)