for Birds of a Feather9/27/2006 c2 special
Hahha. Hayden's the elevator guy? Does he also work at Video Max, or are there just two Haydens?
Hahahha I wonder why Hayden had her smack Zach. Perhaps we shall see. Funny kid, that one.
“Yo, brotha! What up?”
Awesome. :D
Keep writing!
;)allie
Hahha. Hayden's the elevator guy? Does he also work at Video Max, or are there just two Haydens?
Hahahha I wonder why Hayden had her smack Zach. Perhaps we shall see. Funny kid, that one.
“Yo, brotha! What up?”
Awesome. :D
Keep writing!
;)allie
9/27/2006 c1 special
Hahaha! Awesome first chapter.
I could already tell that I'm gonna Love Frankie and her brother. They're both pretty well developed for just one chapter.
More!
;)allie
Hahaha! Awesome first chapter.
I could already tell that I'm gonna Love Frankie and her brother. They're both pretty well developed for just one chapter.
More!
;)allie
8/28/2006 c1 starsdetonate
I like this one, especially the first chapter. Frankie's one radical chick and I agree that you developed a great relationship between her and her brother.Can't wait for more. [:
I like this one, especially the first chapter. Frankie's one radical chick and I agree that you developed a great relationship between her and her brother.Can't wait for more. [:
8/24/2006 c2 
11marsupialgroove
To make this end really fast, you know that in the next chapter you can make Bryce and Frankie get into a car accident or something. That's what I do when I get writer's block; I off a character (or two - sometimes all the characters). You know, whatever works.
But, in all seriousness, good chapter. Not as good as the last, but we've discussed this. :P S'all good and I look forward to more!
11marsupialgrooveTo make this end really fast, you know that in the next chapter you can make Bryce and Frankie get into a car accident or something. That's what I do when I get writer's block; I off a character (or two - sometimes all the characters). You know, whatever works.
But, in all seriousness, good chapter. Not as good as the last, but we've discussed this. :P S'all good and I look forward to more!
8/24/2006 c2 8Megan-TheWriter
Okay, vell you spelt moehawk wrong, yah? At least I think you did... But other than that, very good chapter. I like the whole 'gangsta' thing Frankie did with her brother. It amused me. But most things amused me. Is hayden the elevator guy, or the mystery boy? are they the same person? Oh. Amanda, write more soon, NOW! yeah I realize that makes no sense.
8Megan-TheWriterOkay, vell you spelt moehawk wrong, yah? At least I think you did... But other than that, very good chapter. I like the whole 'gangsta' thing Frankie did with her brother. It amused me. But most things amused me. Is hayden the elevator guy, or the mystery boy? are they the same person? Oh. Amanda, write more soon, NOW! yeah I realize that makes no sense.
8/24/2006 c2 2Chelseamuffin
HEY! Whassoop? Lol, yeah, I feel special. You know, when Zach first mentioned Hay, I had a feeling that I knew who he was ^^ I'm psychic! Lol.
Anyway, so, loved the chap! I dunno, I don't THINK I saw any typos... but that's the problems with reading it, then reviewing a few hours later-you don't remember if there were any typos or mistakes and whatnot. But ah well.
I love Frankie. That's it. Awesome charater, 'Manda.
(ZOMG! School exactly a week from now!)
2ChelseamuffinHEY! Whassoop? Lol, yeah, I feel special. You know, when Zach first mentioned Hay, I had a feeling that I knew who he was ^^ I'm psychic! Lol.
Anyway, so, loved the chap! I dunno, I don't THINK I saw any typos... but that's the problems with reading it, then reviewing a few hours later-you don't remember if there were any typos or mistakes and whatnot. But ah well.
I love Frankie. That's it. Awesome charater, 'Manda.
(ZOMG! School exactly a week from now!)
8/20/2006 c1 Chelseamuffin
Okay, nice chapter. Love Frankie's character. She seems interesting. I noticed one or two spots where there should be a space and there isn't. And, somewhere in the middle, you wrote 'dies' instead of 'died', then left out a 'he' when talking about the father. But I think that's it.
Well, that's all my CC! Lurve the new story, 'Manda! Very nice. And I love the idea. All right, so I've seen the idea of a girl's friend trying to set her up, so what? This one's DIFFERENT, and I can see why! The elevator guy, whose name we still do not know, sounds like the winner already!
I absolutely love it, in case I didn't mention that. But I'm sure I did. So yeah. I am very repetitive, and it runs in the family! (I only found out today, and I'm very excited. Why? I don't know.) So, yeah. I think I'll leave you now, but you MUST update. Soon. Because.
Okay, nice chapter. Love Frankie's character. She seems interesting. I noticed one or two spots where there should be a space and there isn't. And, somewhere in the middle, you wrote 'dies' instead of 'died', then left out a 'he' when talking about the father. But I think that's it.
Well, that's all my CC! Lurve the new story, 'Manda! Very nice. And I love the idea. All right, so I've seen the idea of a girl's friend trying to set her up, so what? This one's DIFFERENT, and I can see why! The elevator guy, whose name we still do not know, sounds like the winner already!
I absolutely love it, in case I didn't mention that. But I'm sure I did. So yeah. I am very repetitive, and it runs in the family! (I only found out today, and I'm very excited. Why? I don't know.) So, yeah. I think I'll leave you now, but you MUST update. Soon. Because.
8/10/2006 c1 11marsupialgroove
Fly together. You and Megan have a fascination with tall men, don't you know? Umm... nit pick. "Mom dies" should be "died", right? About halfway through the chapter. Not that it matters much. I want to see more of this story! I like the relationship you've created between brother and sister and I like their personalities (or what we've seen, anyway). I like the man in the elevator, too. Keep up the great writing.
11marsupialgrooveFly together. You and Megan have a fascination with tall men, don't you know? Umm... nit pick. "Mom dies" should be "died", right? About halfway through the chapter. Not that it matters much. I want to see more of this story! I like the relationship you've created between brother and sister and I like their personalities (or what we've seen, anyway). I like the man in the elevator, too. Keep up the great writing.