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10/21/2006 c1 1supergal
Hey,

I'm getting a good sense of fervor and anger in this chapter, but I think the dialogue is somewhat awkward(?) I think it's because of the grammatical mistakes, for example: 'Sometimes you’d be cold and others you’ll be warm!'. Just try and weave through out the chapter to weed out any grammar/spelling mistakes.

Keep writing!
10/20/2006 c1 3DorKiyki
hey hil-billy? iunno since annie keeps calling tat..i guess i'll call u tat to then. aniways..great plot lol i got confused in the first chapter, buh dun worry i got. pretty sad though..buh that breden evermore is realli a jerk..no offense. aniways i'm so sry it took me so long to R&R if you loved me enough...cuz i'm not realli allowed to use the internet since my parents saw my mark on the interm report thingy..buh i think i can manage going on every once a week. aniways other that..yea.lol. read my new story Love me Kiss me. lol wen i was cleaning up my old books and stuff, i found this discontinued story. so i though i shud probably finish it up lol. and stop thinking i luv u wen i clearly don't T_T
10/18/2006 c16 xonea
really nice! but i've got to ask...wats the first chapter all about? i dun really get the first chapter!

=)
10/18/2006 c16 ms.fuzzy
GOOD JOB! the story is really coming along. and its shaping up really well. keep up the good work!
10/17/2006 c1 1dawn's unforgiving darkness
wow

sounds intense
10/12/2006 c15 xonea
I like itt!
10/11/2006 c2 Jasmine
hello you i love your stories you should become a writer and ill buy all your books i rememeber this from you know what see how good of a memory i have of our friendship
10/10/2006 c14 8Zenosknight
Al'ight, great work =Pmany questions were answered, more were asked, twists were straightened, nevertheless, good work
10/6/2006 c14 Luv-TU
I liked it
10/6/2006 c13 Lch867
Very Interesting. Good Story. I hope you keep updating.
10/6/2006 c13 1n-Iceness
this is amazing!
9/23/2006 c1 diana
hilly billy not sure if i reviewed yet so umm yeahh i really love your plot line im hooked! =) but your street slang is kinda funny you should get a guy to beta this story cause umm "dont freak your pants"? thats uhh not really *cough cough* you know like a popular term...=O but yeah i love your plots they're so interesting =) btw same with leanna sometimes her sentences sound a bit weird maybe you're trying too hard to make her sound prissy and uptight?
9/22/2006 c1 Mashfia
interesting so far. cant wait to read the rest.
9/20/2006 c11 8Zenosknight
Great job so far~You haven't updated in a while, but schools in, so it's understandable.Stories great, unexpected, creative, so I'll rate it about a 4-...so far =P
8/15/2006 c1 thepersonthatlovestrumpets
lol long time since u wrote... but u still got the magical writing power =D the chapter is a lil bit confusing but ill read ur other chapters later to get it... keep up the good work!
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