for Desperation11/4/2007 c1 
219Matthew James Current
I see this as one of those poems which would make perfect sense if I knew the backstory. As it is, it seems like it's more one of those poems you wrote for yourself. Still I can see your style coming through clearly in this piece.
219Matthew James CurrentI see this as one of those poems which would make perfect sense if I knew the backstory. As it is, it seems like it's more one of those poems you wrote for yourself. Still I can see your style coming through clearly in this piece.
9/24/2006 c1 612simpleplan13
I like this too.. the ending is well done and hte whole putting periods in after some letters was very cool
612simpleplan13I like this too.. the ending is well done and hte whole putting periods in after some letters was very cool
8/21/2006 c1 5TheNewUnderground
am completely in love with the last stanza, but for the life of me can't get past the punctuation in the first.
5TheNewUndergroundam completely in love with the last stanza, but for the life of me can't get past the punctuation in the first.
8/20/2006 c1 29diffident
From the first "i'm so, ever so sorry" the mood and voice seems to change a little. Very beautiful though. The change seems suitable. Very intriguing. I'm not sure what meaning the period in "und.erstand", "con.templation-", and "res.peration" add, but that's fine. Didn't take away from the read at all.
marie
29diffidentFrom the first "i'm so, ever so sorry" the mood and voice seems to change a little. Very beautiful though. The change seems suitable. Very intriguing. I'm not sure what meaning the period in "und.erstand", "con.templation-", and "res.peration" add, but that's fine. Didn't take away from the read at all.
marie
8/20/2006 c1 Lady-Liberty-AndMe
I didn't even understand what this was about and I still liked it. It got the point across without telling the story. Nice job.
On a different subject, I just posted a story, and I'd relly appreciate it if you could maybe r/r.
I didn't even understand what this was about and I still liked it. It got the point across without telling the story. Nice job.
On a different subject, I just posted a story, and I'd relly appreciate it if you could maybe r/r.
8/20/2006 c1 12eighteen hundred
I like this. I like the words and the inbetween words and everything. Mexico without doubt.
12eighteen hundredI like this. I like the words and the inbetween words and everything. Mexico without doubt.