for Woven Lies12/15/2006 c1 
1Mosaic Stains
I know I'm very late on this review, please forgive me. I haven't reviewed anyone from fiction press for the longest time, and thought I'd start with you.
Now, about the poem... The meaning of it is there. I can feel it within the words. But it seems kind of lost amongst these type of words. I think the vocabulary choice is strong, but not as defining, nor descriptive as perhaps a two-bit word probably would have been. I'm not a poet, but a lover of its beauty, and therefore I think for an attempt this is very well done. Not lacking, not exactly strong, but wonderful in a more sneaking up on you sort sense.
1Mosaic StainsI know I'm very late on this review, please forgive me. I haven't reviewed anyone from fiction press for the longest time, and thought I'd start with you.
Now, about the poem... The meaning of it is there. I can feel it within the words. But it seems kind of lost amongst these type of words. I think the vocabulary choice is strong, but not as defining, nor descriptive as perhaps a two-bit word probably would have been. I'm not a poet, but a lover of its beauty, and therefore I think for an attempt this is very well done. Not lacking, not exactly strong, but wonderful in a more sneaking up on you sort sense.
11/28/2006 c1 14letsdotheraindance
It was nice how you compared lies to webs. && how she realized se was numb at the end. The last part wasn't that nice, though, but nice nonetheless. :) Awesome choice of words, too.
14letsdotheraindanceIt was nice how you compared lies to webs. && how she realized se was numb at the end. The last part wasn't that nice, though, but nice nonetheless. :) Awesome choice of words, too.
11/27/2006 c1 89Lady DreamWriter
Again, simple but powerful. You are really in touch with your emotions. Very nice use of wording.
89Lady DreamWriterAgain, simple but powerful. You are really in touch with your emotions. Very nice use of wording.
11/23/2006 c1 Crossing the Rubicon
I like the idea of "I think I was killed / Not you." The only part that doesn't fit is: "When you struck my heart /With another / I realised /I've numbed." It seemed a little out of place since nothing followed it to sum up that idea. Other than that, it flows well, and I like it.
I like the idea of "I think I was killed / Not you." The only part that doesn't fit is: "When you struck my heart /With another / I realised /I've numbed." It seemed a little out of place since nothing followed it to sum up that idea. Other than that, it flows well, and I like it.
11/19/2006 c1 M.D.Irvine
i dont read poems much and i dont write any but i like this, the points come across easy. liked it
i dont read poems much and i dont write any but i like this, the points come across easy. liked it