for Not Enough12/15/2006 c1 
1Mosaic Stains
This poem left me with a hum after-thought. It was nice, quite nice. But I believe because it had thinking (something I do too often) by the middle of it, I think I lost the feel of it. Perhaps I'll read it again, after I'm done with this review and try to feel it out.
Anyways it had me thinking of how, many people, particularly women will try and change themselves for someone else. It shows their lack of self-esteem; self-confidance. They rarely come to notice until later on in their years, there is nothing wrong with them, nor with the individual they are trying to change for- sometimes that is. And that perhaps they are trying too hard, which is why others may not view them with good eyes(good eyes meaning, open eyes).
I could go on and on about this subject. But I won't bore you with my review by making it lengthy.
So... nice poem, I enjoy how it put me in a thoughtful mood again.
1Mosaic StainsThis poem left me with a hum after-thought. It was nice, quite nice. But I believe because it had thinking (something I do too often) by the middle of it, I think I lost the feel of it. Perhaps I'll read it again, after I'm done with this review and try to feel it out.
Anyways it had me thinking of how, many people, particularly women will try and change themselves for someone else. It shows their lack of self-esteem; self-confidance. They rarely come to notice until later on in their years, there is nothing wrong with them, nor with the individual they are trying to change for- sometimes that is. And that perhaps they are trying too hard, which is why others may not view them with good eyes(good eyes meaning, open eyes).
I could go on and on about this subject. But I won't bore you with my review by making it lengthy.
So... nice poem, I enjoy how it put me in a thoughtful mood again.
11/28/2006 c1 14letsdotheraindance
I loved how you showed the different stereotype-thingamajigy. && how people don't fit in. The last two lines were wonderful, too. :) Wonderfully written. Though, it could use more words. But all in all, it's pretty nice. :)
14letsdotheraindanceI loved how you showed the different stereotype-thingamajigy. && how people don't fit in. The last two lines were wonderful, too. :) Wonderfully written. Though, it could use more words. But all in all, it's pretty nice. :)
11/27/2006 c1 89Lady DreamWriter
Very nice. I think that everyone wonders this question at some point in their lives. Your style is both simple and powerful at the same time.
Great job.
89Lady DreamWriterVery nice. I think that everyone wonders this question at some point in their lives. Your style is both simple and powerful at the same time.
Great job.
11/25/2006 c1 Crossing the Rubicon
This is decent. The lines "Is it them / Or is it me?" especially stuck out to me, and it ended the poem well.
I also really like the line "And I don't fit in between."
In the fourth stanza (I was never pretty
Athletic
Smart
Witty
Enough for your love)
It would probably be better to replace "smart" with another word since "witty" and "smart" are synonymous.
Good work. :)
I'm going to read & review one (or both) of your stories today or tomorrow. My story reviewing skills may be a little rusty because I haven't read stories on the internet since my fanfiction days a couple years ago. ^_~
This is decent. The lines "Is it them / Or is it me?" especially stuck out to me, and it ended the poem well.
I also really like the line "And I don't fit in between."
In the fourth stanza (I was never pretty
Athletic
Smart
Witty
Enough for your love)
It would probably be better to replace "smart" with another word since "witty" and "smart" are synonymous.
Good work. :)
I'm going to read & review one (or both) of your stories today or tomorrow. My story reviewing skills may be a little rusty because I haven't read stories on the internet since my fanfiction days a couple years ago. ^_~
8/23/2006 c1 ACCOUNT NO LONGER ACTIVE 1
Very good descriptions of trying to find you're individuality through all the stereotyping. I like it.
Very good descriptions of trying to find you're individuality through all the stereotyping. I like it.