for Closed Door10/25/2006 c2 Diana
first few sentences, its supposed to be "an estranged" instead of "a astranged" =)
first few sentences, its supposed to be "an estranged" instead of "a astranged" =)
10/11/2006 c1 
4kamikai bomber
Ok here is where you can send your entries for the Closed Door Contest!
4kamikai bomberOk here is where you can send your entries for the Closed Door Contest!
9/24/2006 c1 Rikichi's Buddy
this is really amazing! i loved how you wrote this. the style is just shockingly good! i'm almost depressed that there's only two chapters.
this is really amazing! i loved how you wrote this. the style is just shockingly good! i'm almost depressed that there's only two chapters.
9/19/2006 c2 PleaseDeleteThisAccountMods
well. that's gross. ha ha ha! guess i shouldn't be talking, huh? ty for the review, dude! #50!ok, the only thing I would advise against in ur story is the language. I mean, its good for effect every once in a while, but not every other sentance. other than that, it's great! keep it up!
well. that's gross. ha ha ha! guess i shouldn't be talking, huh? ty for the review, dude! #50!ok, the only thing I would advise against in ur story is the language. I mean, its good for effect every once in a while, but not every other sentance. other than that, it's great! keep it up!
8/25/2006 c1 1catastrophe25
nice and dark atmosphere here, great style of writing.But just one thing, if you don't want this to be booted off by the mods don't rate it K, rate it T or something
1catastrophe25nice and dark atmosphere here, great style of writing.But just one thing, if you don't want this to be booted off by the mods don't rate it K, rate it T or something