for Search for the Twilight Crystal, The Beginning9/10/2006 c6 
2Casey Drake
...I would work on its and it's... it's a laser gun not a lazer gun, otherwise all right.
:) CD
2Casey Drake...I would work on its and it's... it's a laser gun not a lazer gun, otherwise all right.
:) CD
9/4/2006 c5 linkfreak
He's gonna go? And how does he live for 1700 years?Is the guy a general or a colonel?
He's gonna go? And how does he live for 1700 years?Is the guy a general or a colonel?
9/4/2006 c1 frog
Think this is far too long.
Think this is far too long.
9/1/2006 c4 linkfreak
Irony sucks.It's called rifting now?
Irony sucks.It's called rifting now?
8/31/2006 c3 Linkfreak
I read the cataclysmal crystal the only problem was that your writing was choppy and the chapters were getting shorter and shorter. Anyways This chapter ran kind of fast and i felt somewhat confused... But i still like this part of the story line
I read the cataclysmal crystal the only problem was that your writing was choppy and the chapters were getting shorter and shorter. Anyways This chapter ran kind of fast and i felt somewhat confused... But i still like this part of the story line
8/28/2006 c2 Linkfreak
I think you went a little fast, and that was kind of a wierd ending, but i like the story line, or at least whatever peice you layed out in this one. :]
I think you went a little fast, and that was kind of a wierd ending, but i like the story line, or at least whatever peice you layed out in this one. :]
8/27/2006 c1 another cc
500 terameters a second? Please. The speed of light is 300,0 km/s. This is confusing and frankly, immature. I'm not reading the next chapter until you fix your facts. Do some research. And ONLY 8 billion?
OK?
Other than that, don't be mad. You've got a good style, you just need to put more thought into the history of your little deal here.
Just so it's not a flame, kk?
500 terameters a second? Please. The speed of light is 300,0 km/s. This is confusing and frankly, immature. I'm not reading the next chapter until you fix your facts. Do some research. And ONLY 8 billion?
OK?
Other than that, don't be mad. You've got a good style, you just need to put more thought into the history of your little deal here.
Just so it's not a flame, kk?
8/26/2006 c2 Casey Drake
hmmn. interesting... stil a little info dumping but not as much as the last version.
:) CD
hmmn. interesting... stil a little info dumping but not as much as the last version.
:) CD