for To11/30/2006 c1 Universal Empire
This is very well written! It flowed extremely well! I liked how the repetion fit in with the piece. I like, at the end, how it's "To be a hero, To be THE hero." Extremely well written! Keep writing.
Sadistikal
This is very well written! It flowed extremely well! I liked how the repetion fit in with the piece. I like, at the end, how it's "To be a hero, To be THE hero." Extremely well written! Keep writing.
Sadistikal
11/26/2006 c1 
102Midnight In Eden
The constant repetition of "To" gets slightly irritating towards the end. Personally I've never enjoyed this style but I like what you're trying to say, I think it might work better to put the "to look inside yourself" as the first line of a stanza and then elaborate within the stanza.
That's just my opinion, but I think that within this there is something to be explored further with your writing.
.:midnight:.
102Midnight In EdenThe constant repetition of "To" gets slightly irritating towards the end. Personally I've never enjoyed this style but I like what you're trying to say, I think it might work better to put the "to look inside yourself" as the first line of a stanza and then elaborate within the stanza.
That's just my opinion, but I think that within this there is something to be explored further with your writing.
.:midnight:.
8/31/2006 c1 47PM20
I love the last line, it is such a great way to end the poem. Sometimes poems that use repetition get annoying, but this was good not too long and had a great ending.
47PM20I love the last line, it is such a great way to end the poem. Sometimes poems that use repetition get annoying, but this was good not too long and had a great ending.
8/31/2006 c1 13Draven DarkCrow
whether the lines are supposed to be indented or not, the poem still flows. It's well written, and has strong meaning.
Draven.
13Draven DarkCrowwhether the lines are supposed to be indented or not, the poem still flows. It's well written, and has strong meaning.
Draven.
8/31/2006 c1 82Honor Bound
very good(long time no "see") i liked it, but it seems rather vague to me. like, is it hard to be a hero? or what happems if you do? im not sure im making any sence, but hopefully you get my point. still, good job, look for some new stuff, it will be coming in a little bit. good job, keep it going, peace
82Honor Boundvery good(long time no "see") i liked it, but it seems rather vague to me. like, is it hard to be a hero? or what happems if you do? im not sure im making any sence, but hopefully you get my point. still, good job, look for some new stuff, it will be coming in a little bit. good job, keep it going, peace