for I Really Want to Love You3/2/2007 c1 
38DeathMetal18
"We will be there for eachother like a hand in winter needs a glove." Favorite line. It so deep and shows the true raw emotion that you are trying to portray through this, Note is it? I really liked this and will continue to read more of your work.
P.S Canada owns!
BOB
38DeathMetal18"We will be there for eachother like a hand in winter needs a glove." Favorite line. It so deep and shows the true raw emotion that you are trying to portray through this, Note is it? I really liked this and will continue to read more of your work.
P.S Canada owns!
BOB
10/8/2006 c1 72itsonlyme07
um...I really couldn't get into this at all to be honest. It felt like you wrote the first line and then forced the rest to rhyme.
Keep working and good luck
72itsonlyme07um...I really couldn't get into this at all to be honest. It felt like you wrote the first line and then forced the rest to rhyme.
Keep working and good luck
10/8/2006 c1 69this is britt
your poetry is very unique. it's sweet. nicely written, in the end. keep going!
69this is brittyour poetry is very unique. it's sweet. nicely written, in the end. keep going!
9/30/2006 c1 16SachiSachi
"Social and school issues, holy cow."
Hee hee, know the feeling! That whole stanza is cute. And I love the floating bottle metaphor.
16SachiSachi"Social and school issues, holy cow."
Hee hee, know the feeling! That whole stanza is cute. And I love the floating bottle metaphor.
9/27/2006 c1 41sarah1491
ATTENTION TO ALL READERS:Sorry for reviewing my own poem, but I"d just like to say that line in stanza 2 was not mean to sound "mature". :P Sorry for any confusion! ^_^
41sarah1491ATTENTION TO ALL READERS:Sorry for reviewing my own poem, but I"d just like to say that line in stanza 2 was not mean to sound "mature". :P Sorry for any confusion! ^_^
9/27/2006 c1 64Leeona Trance
I liked most of this one, and except for the second stanza it showed surprisingly mature thoughts about love. "You really amaze me though, wow!" Made me laugh. The rest of it, however, was beautiful. Great poem, keep writing! You have talent. ^.^
~LT
64Leeona TranceI liked most of this one, and except for the second stanza it showed surprisingly mature thoughts about love. "You really amaze me though, wow!" Made me laugh. The rest of it, however, was beautiful. Great poem, keep writing! You have talent. ^.^
~LT
9/26/2006 c1 231someday-i-will
Aww this one's sweet. One thing I would say is the rhyming- it sounds forced, but yeah, it's hard not to. Thanks for the review by the way. Oh and the 'just like anyone' thing you commented on is supposed to sound ironic xx
231someday-i-willAww this one's sweet. One thing I would say is the rhyming- it sounds forced, but yeah, it's hard not to. Thanks for the review by the way. Oh and the 'just like anyone' thing you commented on is supposed to sound ironic xx
9/25/2006 c1 16brokendreams21
*tear* It's so beautiful. Let me know if this is written about anyone in particular...Haha. Anyways, this is really pretty. It makes me feel so happy! Just...really good. One of your best works. Keep up the awesome job!
16brokendreams21*tear* It's so beautiful. Let me know if this is written about anyone in particular...Haha. Anyways, this is really pretty. It makes me feel so happy! Just...really good. One of your best works. Keep up the awesome job!
9/24/2006 c1 56felicia13
The last line is just ... spectacular.
But, the rhyming throughout seems forced and not at all natural. If you're going to try to make a rhyming poem, you have to let it flow naturally, and not force it all into rhymes for the sake of rhyming. Because then it looks bad.
But the subject is a great one, and I think it could completely dominate if you did something less forced on it. Maybe a free verse?
Felicia.
56felicia13The last line is just ... spectacular.
But, the rhyming throughout seems forced and not at all natural. If you're going to try to make a rhyming poem, you have to let it flow naturally, and not force it all into rhymes for the sake of rhyming. Because then it looks bad.
But the subject is a great one, and I think it could completely dominate if you did something less forced on it. Maybe a free verse?
Felicia.