
5/15/2010 c1
9Corinna Tate
Man, it was really starting to get scary until she changed and breathed fire! Sorry, I had say it since your cast of characters at the Shepherd's Table soup kitchen sounded downright evil!

Man, it was really starting to get scary until she changed and breathed fire! Sorry, I had say it since your cast of characters at the Shepherd's Table soup kitchen sounded downright evil!
7/26/2009 c1 Brenda Agaro
Great imagery, sentence structure, perspective, character interaction, word choice, and suspense. Clever characterization and I really like how you showed their actions. Also, great job on the ending. :D
Great imagery, sentence structure, perspective, character interaction, word choice, and suspense. Clever characterization and I really like how you showed their actions. Also, great job on the ending. :D
7/10/2009 c1
24TheJacklyn
What? OMG! That had happened before? Well written. Well written. I love your stories.
BP-BW

What? OMG! That had happened before? Well written. Well written. I love your stories.
BP-BW
2/19/2009 c1
9Narq
OMG! That was wonderful! I enjoyed it~ it was rather credible and interesting!~
Narq.

OMG! That was wonderful! I enjoyed it~ it was rather credible and interesting!~
Narq.
11/10/2008 c1 HellOnToast
Do you not love the joy of surprise inspiration.
This is a very well-written story, the balance between the characters, the violence, and the prose were perfect.
Keep up the good work!
Do you not love the joy of surprise inspiration.
This is a very well-written story, the balance between the characters, the violence, and the prose were perfect.
Keep up the good work!
3/24/2008 c1
11Distilledfx
Awesome story. The hole thing just has this awful disgusting slimy feel to it. About the only thing you could have done further is describe the rice as little "maggots" but thank you for not doing that. Definitely a different story, it makes me want to write

Awesome story. The hole thing just has this awful disgusting slimy feel to it. About the only thing you could have done further is describe the rice as little "maggots" but thank you for not doing that. Definitely a different story, it makes me want to write
8/2/2007 c1
1onlyuptosaveit
And it finally occurs to me –
“Oh no, oh God, oh no –”
It happened again!
HAHAHAHA! 'Oops, I did it again!' [now I now why people say I have a song for everything XD]

And it finally occurs to me –
“Oh no, oh God, oh no –”
It happened again!
HAHAHAHA! 'Oops, I did it again!' [now I now why people say I have a song for everything XD]
1/13/2007 c1
2NSMounts
If you haven't already, you should submit some of your stuff to a few magazines because this was really, really good.
*DRAGON MOUTH*
ARGH!

If you haven't already, you should submit some of your stuff to a few magazines because this was really, really good.
*DRAGON MOUTH*
ARGH!
12/18/2006 c1 rachel
hehe, i like this story.
hehe, i like this story.
11/14/2006 c1 mirokusan
Oh, you are so right - that is a PERFECT ending!
Oh, you are so right - that is a PERFECT ending!
11/3/2006 c1 Julian
Ha... well, that was a great dissapointment. i was hoping for more chapters, more disgustingly awesome description, more GORE... honestly, this was a great beginning.
Ha... well, that was a great dissapointment. i was hoping for more chapters, more disgustingly awesome description, more GORE... honestly, this was a great beginning.