for Autumn10/28/2006 c1 bipedalcooney
This has a lot of life to it for a haiku. I LOVE this. Great work and keep writing.
This has a lot of life to it for a haiku. I LOVE this. Great work and keep writing.
10/26/2006 c1 
157hanfiddle
This provides a very nice image of fall morning or midday
suggestion for the last line:
In the breeze kids play
which: links the fluttering leaves and the playing kids to the breeze...
Good work: keep on writing
157hanfiddleThis provides a very nice image of fall morning or midday
suggestion for the last line:
In the breeze kids play
which: links the fluttering leaves and the playing kids to the breeze...
Good work: keep on writing
9/7/2006 c1 16Theory Of The 4th Dimension
Such a sparkling image...a short tale of forgotten innocence, at least that's what I got out of this...
16Theory Of The 4th DimensionSuch a sparkling image...a short tale of forgotten innocence, at least that's what I got out of this...