for Numbed9/12/2006 c1 
34give me back my childhood
that's really sad. just reading it made me feel... weird inside. great job! (:
34give me back my childhoodthat's really sad. just reading it made me feel... weird inside. great job! (:
9/10/2006 c1 41BearHeart
This is well expressed. I like the sense of being outside of usual awareness that you have created. In the second stanza the words "I don't think so" bring awareness back into the picture for a moment. I am not sure whether that was your intent or not.
41BearHeartThis is well expressed. I like the sense of being outside of usual awareness that you have created. In the second stanza the words "I don't think so" bring awareness back into the picture for a moment. I am not sure whether that was your intent or not.
9/10/2006 c1 118Thenardier
This is nice. Emotive and descriptive. The angst did not go overboard. I loved the ending. Nicely done.
118ThenardierThis is nice. Emotive and descriptive. The angst did not go overboard. I loved the ending. Nicely done.
9/10/2006 c1 7Summer Walters
Nicely done. You manage to rhyme AND write a meaningful poem. If I try to rhyme I can only write lame ones that attempt at humor but end up kind of silly.
I really liked the lines
"As I sit here,Playing a looping tune,I watch a kid go by,Waving his red balloon."
There's something very mechanically carefree about that image.
7Summer WaltersNicely done. You manage to rhyme AND write a meaningful poem. If I try to rhyme I can only write lame ones that attempt at humor but end up kind of silly.
I really liked the lines
"As I sit here,Playing a looping tune,I watch a kid go by,Waving his red balloon."
There's something very mechanically carefree about that image.
9/9/2006 c1 81Princess-anna57
Wow, this is amazing. I heart the ending. Excellent. Keep writing!
~Anna~ ^_^
81Princess-anna57Wow, this is amazing. I heart the ending. Excellent. Keep writing!
~Anna~ ^_^