for I Love Her, Really9/25/2007 c1 
5YoungInside
Powerful piece.
This is a good one.
Could be a little more descriptive but I think it's fine now. =)
5YoungInsidePowerful piece.
This is a good one.
Could be a little more descriptive but I think it's fine now. =)
9/12/2007 c1 3abridgedone
This is beautiful in one of those heart-wrenching ways. You have beautiful wording and a gentle flow. I always love pieces like this; they're not quite stories, but more like an excerpt from a greater novel that one longs to read.
You portray the helplessness and longing to help quite well.
Kudos. :)
3abridgedoneThis is beautiful in one of those heart-wrenching ways. You have beautiful wording and a gentle flow. I always love pieces like this; they're not quite stories, but more like an excerpt from a greater novel that one longs to read.
You portray the helplessness and longing to help quite well.
Kudos. :)
7/25/2007 c1 150SpawnMeister666
I think this could work as a prelude to a bigger piece, maybe something explaining the relationship between the narrator and the girl, how they met, how their relationship developed, and how it ended...
Spawny
150SpawnMeister666I think this could work as a prelude to a bigger piece, maybe something explaining the relationship between the narrator and the girl, how they met, how their relationship developed, and how it ended...
Spawny