for The Best Day Of My Life10/2/2006 c1 
7bright-silver-star
i like it...its short...but sad and deep..kinda...and can u please update on everyone loves to hate someone soon-ish...its killing me...i love it
7bright-silver-stari like it...its short...but sad and deep..kinda...and can u please update on everyone loves to hate someone soon-ish...its killing me...i love it
9/14/2006 c1 24Limited Edition
I fricking love the ending XD
There is a general lack of emotion in the whole piece. Even though it's all about emotions, I don't feel any at all when reading it. It feels like it's just general fact, the tone. Almost impersonal. But I guess that was what you were going for.
The only mistake I found was: "His fist connected with my face, as in turn I connected with the floor." Don't use the same word twice...in the same sentence XD
Good work hun!
24Limited EditionI fricking love the ending XD
There is a general lack of emotion in the whole piece. Even though it's all about emotions, I don't feel any at all when reading it. It feels like it's just general fact, the tone. Almost impersonal. But I guess that was what you were going for.
The only mistake I found was: "His fist connected with my face, as in turn I connected with the floor." Don't use the same word twice...in the same sentence XD
Good work hun!