for Conquers of the Mind3/23/2013 c1 La La Land
Wow. That was cool. You should do more poetry.
Wow. That was cool. You should do more poetry.
8/25/2010 c1 
1x Farii
I totally get this.
But it should be 'And drank my old red wine', not "And drunk my old red wine".
There's a difference.
But other than that, loved it! The flow of the rhythm was nice :)
1x FariiI totally get this.
But it should be 'And drank my old red wine', not "And drunk my old red wine".
There's a difference.
But other than that, loved it! The flow of the rhythm was nice :)
2/4/2007 c1 80magnusthewolf
interesting poem here. i think the last line would sound better as "none better" because it would flow/sound better...also, direct addresses need commas on both sides...so commas should be before each "my love"
80magnusthewolfinteresting poem here. i think the last line would sound better as "none better" because it would flow/sound better...also, direct addresses need commas on both sides...so commas should be before each "my love"
9/20/2006 c1 56from beneath the bell jar
I like it and I enjoyed the subtle rhyme. Good piece.
You should check out my new poem "Giving Up"
56from beneath the bell jarI like it and I enjoyed the subtle rhyme. Good piece.
You should check out my new poem "Giving Up"