for Bone Picker12/22/2006 c1 His Mercy's Waiting
Brilliant first chapter. Your descriptions were flawlessly detailed, as where the narrator's thoughts. Great job.
Brilliant first chapter. Your descriptions were flawlessly detailed, as where the narrator's thoughts. Great job.
10/4/2006 c3 perfectsquares
the way you described the restaurant was my favorite. awesome job, keep up the good work! :]
the way you described the restaurant was my favorite. awesome job, keep up the good work! :]
10/1/2006 c2 
1Bryanna
The title of this story makes me cringe... in a good way, I think. And it's so damn hard to find quality on this site and many others, but you have to be one of the best writers I've come across. When/if you finish this, publish it, and I'll buy it.
1BryannaThe title of this story makes me cringe... in a good way, I think. And it's so damn hard to find quality on this site and many others, but you have to be one of the best writers I've come across. When/if you finish this, publish it, and I'll buy it.
9/30/2006 c2 girlimposter
keep going...if you wanted more feed back sorry i just cant seem to explain what the story is like...but to me it sounds good...
keep going...if you wanted more feed back sorry i just cant seem to explain what the story is like...but to me it sounds good...
9/26/2006 c1 4Dark-Chrno
I loved this first chapter, the beginning is deep and with every word written it almost like poetry describing the event. I hope that this only the beginning and you will continue it. I would love to know how it continues.
4Dark-ChrnoI loved this first chapter, the beginning is deep and with every word written it almost like poetry describing the event. I hope that this only the beginning and you will continue it. I would love to know how it continues.
9/24/2006 c1 63lackluster
oh. wow.
this is pouring with imagery. i don't know what to say except that i love it.
63lacklusteroh. wow.
this is pouring with imagery. i don't know what to say except that i love it.
9/22/2006 c1 perfectsquares
the details were amazing-the way you described the characters and scenery, etc.i can't wait for more.
the details were amazing-the way you described the characters and scenery, etc.i can't wait for more.
9/22/2006 c1 3Just One More Author
It's a rare day when I read something that catches my attention from the opening line.
"Red, orange and yellow tears from the sweeping fall trees painted his coffin, which reflected the dim sunlight without enthusiasm." Beautiful.
I love your use of metaphors; the characters are complex and bursting with life, and I'm already finding myself waiting for the next chapter.
I really, REALLY liked this.
3Just One More AuthorIt's a rare day when I read something that catches my attention from the opening line.
"Red, orange and yellow tears from the sweeping fall trees painted his coffin, which reflected the dim sunlight without enthusiasm." Beautiful.
I love your use of metaphors; the characters are complex and bursting with life, and I'm already finding myself waiting for the next chapter.
I really, REALLY liked this.
9/22/2006 c1 lovely ruins
very nicely written, although perhaps a little too rich in figurative speech for my taste. you have a wonderful way with words.
very nicely written, although perhaps a little too rich in figurative speech for my taste. you have a wonderful way with words.