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11/17/2008 c1 16MadamWriterGal
I really like the image of autumn crawling in. It was the perfect reoccurring line to use in the poem. Good job!
11/2/2006 c1 49ignominy
i like how you go the whole way through theyear and back to fall instead of stopping at spring or summer. i also like how you can notice the change from season to season - like how i can tell its not wint anymore without you saying "its not winter anymore" i like this alot but i think you could have done better on the end, it kind of made my mind wander, so i think you could improve that but i liked all the rest. good job.
10/10/2006 c1 An-Author-At-Heart
LOVELY! I liked it, the imagery was great. It's a good representation of the seasons,especially in CANADA! :D always love to meet a patriotic Canadian. I enjoyed this, good job!

And thanks so much for both your reviews of "Dead from Disconnection" and "Imprisoned". I know in Imprisoned I made it seem so horrible, but for diabetics, diagnosis is sometimes really hard to handle, especially because it comes out of the blue (and the poem's from when i was first diagnosed). It was interesting to know you know people with both types, not many people know much about it!
10/9/2006 c1 879Moondog Dozier
Marvelous circular thought. I like how this progresses while still paying attention to the differences in the season, and the emotions-reactions the speaker has to them. Good work.
10/9/2006 c1 50In the Rye
Entirely too ordinary. It lacks what it needs to draw you in.
10/9/2006 c1 14Kuzuki Sugimorii
Y'know, I'm impressed. This really captures the essence of the seasons well. And your choice of words for the changes from season to season were perfect. For example, in the line "Summer has drifted away once again", the word "drifted" gives a sense of disappointment (not the word I was looking for, but the closest thing to it) to the section.

Beautiful work, keep it up. I'm looking forward to the next works I read.
10/8/2006 c1 68this is britt
I like it. it's very palpable. it's cute. it's got some childlike quality to it. I mean, some parts were corny, but in the end you did a nice job.
10/7/2006 c1 nehelia
This is a really great! I can't wait for autumn!
10/1/2006 c1 237classic violet
wow, vivid. love it.
9/30/2006 c1 9Sakura Taking
This is so pretty! This gives such a calming and homely feeling. You've created a great imagery as well. Awesome job!
9/30/2006 c1 16SachiSachi
I love the imagry tied with the chronology to depict a whole year. :)

And thank you so much for all your kind reviews! I'm having fun rummaging around in your gallery. :D
9/30/2006 c1 polka dots and addictions
lovely imaginary in this, and you've painted some good images. I like the personificatuion at the beginning. thanks for the reviews =)~Bex xx
9/27/2006 c1 64Leeona Trance
I like how you make autumn seem... dire. It fits with the season, that autumn is when things start to die or go into hibernation. Winter seems fun and innocent, and summer as well. Autumn was definitely what stuck out in this poem. I liked it.

And thank you for all your reviews! Wow, it just made my day. ^_^

~Leeona Trance
9/25/2006 c1 zz00
Not bad. Very straight-forward. It builds a pleasant image. I would only suggest that you use more figurative language, but that's just a preference. Anyhoo, Great job!:)

P.S, merci de me critiquer, je l'apprecie! T'es pas terrible en français, donc t'inquiète pas! T'as bien lu mes oeuvres. Alors je te remercie, et bonne chance dans le monde de la littérature!:)
9/25/2006 c1 81Princess-anna57
*applaudes* this is amazing! Good on you! Keep writing!

~Anna~ ^_^
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