for Life is a Winding Road10/5/2006 c1 
56hellbentheretic
Didn't quite get the title at first until I read the end. Good descriptions, especially the one of Emma. Liked the part about her saying that "santa could bring anything, right?" This is a good way to develop characters- by simply throwing them into a situation and seeing how they react. Don't really know if the story has much merit in it, though. Seems to go quite smoothly (as it can, anyways) at the beginning. And then BOOM its Christmas and everything is happy after Serena gets her Mini Coop.I think I don't like it for the fact that you took the main character with all these feelings about finding her father dying and then dropping them as if they were nothing when she saw the car. I know that at the end she says to herself that this ride is for her father, but the car just seems misplaced except for the fact that it ties the title into it.
hellbentheretic
56hellbenthereticDidn't quite get the title at first until I read the end. Good descriptions, especially the one of Emma. Liked the part about her saying that "santa could bring anything, right?" This is a good way to develop characters- by simply throwing them into a situation and seeing how they react. Don't really know if the story has much merit in it, though. Seems to go quite smoothly (as it can, anyways) at the beginning. And then BOOM its Christmas and everything is happy after Serena gets her Mini Coop.I think I don't like it for the fact that you took the main character with all these feelings about finding her father dying and then dropping them as if they were nothing when she saw the car. I know that at the end she says to herself that this ride is for her father, but the car just seems misplaced except for the fact that it ties the title into it.
hellbentheretic
9/27/2006 c1 16brokendreams21
Oh boo. A happy ending. I'm joking. It's so bittersweet to say the least...and the ending is so touching. Awh. But I still liked the sad bits the best because they were the most expressive. Keep up the awesome job!
16brokendreams21Oh boo. A happy ending. I'm joking. It's so bittersweet to say the least...and the ending is so touching. Awh. But I still liked the sad bits the best because they were the most expressive. Keep up the awesome job!