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10/1/2006 c1 15Greenery
Disregarding a few punctuation mistakes, I loved this. It is a little senseless, but it's very cool. Good going. I'll I'd fix in the first paragraph under PLAY. The caps and excessive exclamation points make it obnoxious, and when soemone else begins speaking it usually needs to be a new paragraph.

Other than that, awesome.
9/29/2006 c1 6holadios
thats sad, depressing, and strange...

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