for The Sleepover Massacre10/5/2006 c1 
3Wonderland's Secret
Are you going to write more of this? I hope so because I'm really interested.
3Wonderland's SecretAre you going to write more of this? I hope so because I'm really interested.
10/4/2006 c1 15don juan banana
this story BLOWS ! its unoriginal no good dialogue no 16 yr old sppeaks like that U HAVE A LOT OF NERVE!*..! plZz rede and review my stories !..*
15don juan bananathis story BLOWS ! its unoriginal no good dialogue no 16 yr old sppeaks like that U HAVE A LOT OF NERVE!*..! plZz rede and review my stories !..*
10/3/2006 c1 14CK Shorty
I think it's good so far. In the beginning, I was thinking scream and I'm glad it was said that he was acting like the man in the movie. :o) Overall, I enjoyed the read and if I noticed several out of place things like she did, I would've called the police instead of letting it go. If you always close a certain door and it's open, there's obviously something wrong, but then again alot of people don't follow their gut feeling. Good read! I enjoyed the chapter :o)
14CK ShortyI think it's good so far. In the beginning, I was thinking scream and I'm glad it was said that he was acting like the man in the movie. :o) Overall, I enjoyed the read and if I noticed several out of place things like she did, I would've called the police instead of letting it go. If you always close a certain door and it's open, there's obviously something wrong, but then again alot of people don't follow their gut feeling. Good read! I enjoyed the chapter :o)
10/2/2006 c1 1brit.ish.rock.teen
That first line that the caller said...instantly gripped me. Amazing. The girls were very believeable, almost surprisingly so. I honestly couldn't find a flaw...other than the fact that it ended unresolved...though before I read it I saw where you wrote that the story had more coming anyway.
I am starting to write our little project thing...and I have to say I feel pressured to write really good considering who I am working with.
Goodnight, and good luck.
chuckle chuckle
1brit.ish.rock.teenThat first line that the caller said...instantly gripped me. Amazing. The girls were very believeable, almost surprisingly so. I honestly couldn't find a flaw...other than the fact that it ended unresolved...though before I read it I saw where you wrote that the story had more coming anyway.
I am starting to write our little project thing...and I have to say I feel pressured to write really good considering who I am working with.
Goodnight, and good luck.
chuckle chuckle
10/2/2006 c1 15Greenery
I like this so far, though there are certainly a few major grammatical errors. For instance, you start out in the present tense and then change to past! And I rather think some of the characters' behavior is unrealistic. I can't imagine any girl deciding to walk out into a dark street after something like that-females are usually more cautious, even when scary things haven't just happened. Two of my friends and I were walking on a street at night recently, and though none of us were afraid of the dark we all had our cell phones out with "91" dialed and ready to go.
But I do like it, so I'll check out the next chapter.
15GreeneryI like this so far, though there are certainly a few major grammatical errors. For instance, you start out in the present tense and then change to past! And I rather think some of the characters' behavior is unrealistic. I can't imagine any girl deciding to walk out into a dark street after something like that-females are usually more cautious, even when scary things haven't just happened. Two of my friends and I were walking on a street at night recently, and though none of us were afraid of the dark we all had our cell phones out with "91" dialed and ready to go.
But I do like it, so I'll check out the next chapter.
10/1/2006 c1 7Neurotripsy
This isnt the kind of story I'd normaly be into, but it's very well writen and interesting. I'd love to read more. :)
7NeurotripsyThis isnt the kind of story I'd normaly be into, but it's very well writen and interesting. I'd love to read more. :)