for To Whom it May Concern10/2/2006 c1 
84DemonicDestiny
So true! All of this really happens everywheres and it's great that you would write something that's so true. Good job!
84DemonicDestinySo true! All of this really happens everywheres and it's great that you would write something that's so true. Good job!
10/2/2006 c1 10Rosemarine
Good topic but you need to learn to GRAB SOMEONE BY THE FACE AND DRAW THEM IN AND KEEP THEM THERE! If this were a painting, you would need to take a couple buckets of paint and splatter it and take a knife and rip it in places. You get the idea. I hope.
10RosemarineGood topic but you need to learn to GRAB SOMEONE BY THE FACE AND DRAW THEM IN AND KEEP THEM THERE! If this were a painting, you would need to take a couple buckets of paint and splatter it and take a knife and rip it in places. You get the idea. I hope.
10/2/2006 c1 54SirenThird
A bit cliche, and it didn't have much of a rhythm to it. But every so often a word would connect to a rhyming word from a few lines up and it pulled together in a nice way. You might try breaking it up into stanzas instead of one large piece.
54SirenThirdA bit cliche, and it didn't have much of a rhythm to it. But every so often a word would connect to a rhyming word from a few lines up and it pulled together in a nice way. You might try breaking it up into stanzas instead of one large piece.
10/2/2006 c1 50In the Rye
The topic is slightly overused and unoriginal. Accually, the whole thig is a bit dull.
50In the RyeThe topic is slightly overused and unoriginal. Accually, the whole thig is a bit dull.