for Haiku Collection 21/6/2007 c3 
15Banshee Junior
I liked the first two, but jumped up and 'squee'd on seeing this one! It's vivid and yells out in a burst of colour.Though I do love the 'yellow glow' in the pumpkin lantern! I'm hoping to see more of this in the future!
15Banshee JuniorI liked the first two, but jumped up and 'squee'd on seeing this one! It's vivid and yells out in a burst of colour.Though I do love the 'yellow glow' in the pumpkin lantern! I'm hoping to see more of this in the future!
11/13/2006 c3 x account closed x
well, i honestly can't choose a favorite between you and your friends writing, however since there was a larger selection of yours and i can get the feel better i would pick you. but hers was awesome as well.
i really like the flow of these. they didn't strike me as haiku, as strange as that sounds. most haikus seemed forced, like the author sat there was 20 minutes muttering silently to themselves, trying to figure out if whatchamacalit had 4 sylables or 6.
and as starnge as THAT was, it was supposed to be a compliment :)
loved these, keep it up you guys.
well, i honestly can't choose a favorite between you and your friends writing, however since there was a larger selection of yours and i can get the feel better i would pick you. but hers was awesome as well.
i really like the flow of these. they didn't strike me as haiku, as strange as that sounds. most haikus seemed forced, like the author sat there was 20 minutes muttering silently to themselves, trying to figure out if whatchamacalit had 4 sylables or 6.
and as starnge as THAT was, it was supposed to be a compliment :)
loved these, keep it up you guys.
11/2/2006 c2 49ignominy
i like the pumpkin one best, of course i've always loved pumpkins, especially near holloween, pumpkin pie, pumpkin seeds- all of it. i like the wording "eerie glow" and you placed it well. i like this, try writing haikus with more discriptive words too.
49ignominyi like the pumpkin one best, of course i've always loved pumpkins, especially near holloween, pumpkin pie, pumpkin seeds- all of it. i like the wording "eerie glow" and you placed it well. i like this, try writing haikus with more discriptive words too.
10/10/2006 c3 An-Author-At-Heart
Oh this one was my favourite! A very lovely contrast, I must say. Lovely imagery here, i can see the picture of the red rose blowing in the wind. Very good! :D
Oh this one was my favourite! A very lovely contrast, I must say. Lovely imagery here, i can see the picture of the red rose blowing in the wind. Very good! :D
10/10/2006 c2 An-Author-At-Heart
Oh lovely. That bit of imagery is nice, and I like tiny bit of rhyme with light and night.
Oh lovely. That bit of imagery is nice, and I like tiny bit of rhyme with light and night.
10/10/2006 c3 criti-sized
Well, I can't give any feedback on haikus, being that I already mentioned I suck at them, but the imagery of this one is nice.
Well, I can't give any feedback on haikus, being that I already mentioned I suck at them, but the imagery of this one is nice.
10/10/2006 c1 criti-sized
This was a really nice haiku. I normally don't read them, but decided to try my luck on them, and this is really nice. The fact that it's about halloween makes it cute.
Also thanks for the review for my poems.
This was a really nice haiku. I normally don't read them, but decided to try my luck on them, and this is really nice. The fact that it's about halloween makes it cute.
Also thanks for the review for my poems.
10/9/2006 c2 Moondog Dozier
Very Visual. I like the contrast of light off of a specific image. Good work. I'll try to send you a haiku for your collection.
Very Visual. I like the contrast of light off of a specific image. Good work. I'll try to send you a haiku for your collection.
10/9/2006 c3 Moondog Dozier
Very poignant. I like how you use the color in the end line to contrast with the season. Good haiku.
Very poignant. I like how you use the color in the end line to contrast with the season. Good haiku.
10/9/2006 c3 9Sakura Taking
I think the third haiku really completes the collection because it ties the two themes together very well. Very beautiful and somewhat vivid imagery. Awesome work! =)
9Sakura TakingI think the third haiku really completes the collection because it ties the two themes together very well. Very beautiful and somewhat vivid imagery. Awesome work! =)
10/9/2006 c2 Sakura Taking
I think I like this better than the first one. This one has a better flow and imagery. Keep it up!
I think I like this better than the first one. This one has a better flow and imagery. Keep it up!